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Martin
12/24/21, 6:15 PM
This was disturbingly hot, damn it!
Dec 24, 2021
12/24/21, 6:14 PM
Is this your first story? Nice work. You laid out the details of this kind of total power exchange relationship well. Nothing surprising here, but this is the classic total power exchange master/slave fantasy in a nutshell. I think it would help if you delved into the mindset of your submissive character more deeply, helped the reader understand why a young man in such a position (3rd year lawyer?) would want to add such a relationship on top of that, and what he's getting out of it aside from the abuse. It would also be interesting to see more of the master's mindset, but I understand these fantasies are usually written from the submissive perspective, and it's pretty normal for the master characters to come across like sphinxes.
12/24/21, 1:50 PM
What can I say Derek? All of the guys above have already done that. It's been amazing to see the writers journey you've been on over the years with your stories, ideas and how you develop your characters. One of your experimental stories actually gave me the idea I am using for my Masters in Creative writing. Please continue, you are an inspiration for some of us. Your playing with various genres is always great to see too. Also, you have a talent for managing a viewers expectations and then surpassing them Now the compliment is done. That was also a damn hot story. Thanks. TC

12/24/21, 4:47 PM
Whoa @Tattcub! You can’t just drop that about your Masters and not tell me more! Which story? What’s the idea?
12/24/21, 10:16 AM
Very nice story. I liked the bondage part. I especially loved the ending where all of them "live happily ever after"

12/24/21, 2:00 PM
@Nephilim Thanks, Nephilium. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
12/24/21, 5:53 AM
This is the hottest damned story I've read in a hella long time. It just keeps getting better and better. The only thing I would recommend is proofreading the text. This is looking like a great novel to be posted for sale on Kindle. Get the small shit right--misspellings, etc.-- and it would be perfect.
12/24/21, 12:51 AM
I really enjoyed this, Derek. Like you, while I love unapologetically hot sex, I also love subtext and exploring how characters play off of each other. Blame it on my being a psychology nerd;) Dalton's mental shift is interesting, his use of power is unique, if somewhat unethical, and I appreciated how he met his match in the shopkeeper. Stories where a guy steamrolls all his unwitting guy friends wills get boring fast. Lastly, I love the "words making reality" trope, so thanks for including it.

12/24/21, 2:44 AM
Thank ye' @Hew Mesmer! This story was a risk, making someone smarter isn't exactly my typical MO. I'm really pleased to see how many people are finding it interesting and fun to read. I also love how many people are calling Dalton out for being unethical, as though most of the characters on this site behave ethically ;) I agree - stories can get repetitive if you just use the same mechanic over and over again. I actually really love Absman420's work for the way he takes a premise and applies it across situations to get a huge variety of engaging scenarios. I wrote a story earlier this year called "– and then the same thing happens to Bob" based off Absman's name for the problem where you want to keep a story going but inevitably perform the same transformation over and over. Everytime Dalton does a change (that we can see) he's also learning about his power and growing into a new person, so that naturally leads us to new places. I enjoyed the scene where Dalton is effectively experimenting to find which trope he's experiencing. I think experimentation to learn is one of the hallmarks of intelligence, so it makes sense that Dalton would see just how far he can push it.
12/24/21, 12:41 AM
A very enjoyable reality change for the frat! It was hot, funny, sweet, and a very pleasurable story to read. Maybe Dalton could be reminded to remove his cuffs from time to time to make the porn more orgasmic for him. I'm glad you removed the parts you mentioned where Dalton just changes people and tosses them away. Your story has a lot of heart.

12/24/21, 2:37 AM
Thanks @Cutlerfan! I had a lot of fun writing it, I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. In the original draft, Dalton actually hired two security guards whose whole job was to force him back into the cuffs after he took them off for sex. In the published version, I think we can safely say that everytime Dalton stars in a shoot, the shopkeeper will be there to make sure he gets his smarts back after.
12/22/21, 8:02 PM
LOVED the story!!! But I love any Derek Williams story so there's that. Maybe I missed something, but I didn't see any gay to straight action...confused as to why it's a tag.

12/22/21, 8:59 PM
Thanks @thequirkyone! Josh goes from a gay dude to a straight guy who likes to sneak off on his girlfriend and get fucked by jocks. We don't actually see any straight action in this story because I don't really care about straight sex.

12/23/21, 9:30 PM
@Derek Williams Oh DUH! Maybe I've been dumbing myself down too much lol
12/23/21, 7:48 PM
The doctor may mix the different bull's milk in his own transformation. May even up the amount to make himself a bull's bull. How do you not play with the possibilities as the horny scientist. There was a old Josef Howard story "Muscle Service Station" that explored bull testosterone to transform men. Sadly no lactation but the main character was given an extra dose.

12/23/21, 7:54 PM
@TexMuscle Oh damn, you just gave me a really great idea. Hah. I'm not gonna say any more about that though. I think it might spoil things. -edit- I will say though that there's a reason the Doctor makes his bulls train their asses, and not just the cows. I'll leave it at that though.

12/23/21, 8:06 PM
@amul If you need someone to bounce ideas back and forth message me. Both heads are nodding along with the ideas running through my mind.
Martin
12/23/21, 8:00 PM
I wonder if Callum ends up being tamed and falling into his new role as his brother's boy toy...