Recent Comments

4/7/23, 4:29 AM
Very excited for where this is going. One of the best examples of POV writing I've seen in a while, too. The characters' internal monologues feel recognizably different and help establish who they are. I'm definitely getting horny for Max right along with Jacob, nice teasing ;)
4/7/23, 4:11 AM
I've read this several times now, cannot wait for the next one!
4/7/23, 2:54 AM
This checks a lot of boxes. Slow burn. Characters I can get invested in. Great hypnosis. Really looking forward to the next chapter.
4/7/23, 1:42 AM
I hope this isn’t over it’s great! Love the way you have written a brat getting put in his place.
4/6/23, 11:16 PM
Ooh yeah, this is hot and sexy. I don't know where things will go in the future - some of the tags might lead to directions I don't often go in fiction - but the writing and the characters and the set up here is supremely hot and sexy and fun to read and very enjoyable. Also I like the two pov's in one story - fun stuff seeing both perspectives, especially as the hypnosis is from the dom's. I hope that Max becomes a good boy subby bottom for dom top Jacob, hehe. Big sub, small top is hot! I also like how Jacob is helping Max with his classes and I hope that continues - like thanks to his new sir Max does really well in sports and academics and stuff. Maybe Max can also have some of his frat buddies and team bros get some hypnosis too. hehe Yeah fun and sexy chapter!
4/6/23, 10:04 PM
Thank you so much for the story!! I'm loving it so far and already looking forward for more - it's odd but there's not a lot of stories that feature like proper, believable hypnosis. It's always so exciting when one does appear! Liked your style of writing too!
4/6/23, 7:58 PM
hope Max becomes a real regular
4/6/23, 5:37 PM
I like the slow start pacing of the story. Make the character's personality gradually changes was quite the delight. I wonder if you are going for the mindless route or the semi-aware conscious trance. I personally think that it was great if the target perceived what seemed to be abnormal or strange behavior, to be a normal, everyday routine. Retain their personality, but change their perceptions to whatever the hypnotist felt like doing.
4/6/23, 3:19 PM
Enjoyed this one hope there will be more chapters in the future.

Kip
4/6/23, 4:52 PM
@[JustMeCMH66](/user/show/10002441) I agree! Did Max drive back to the frat house, in only his compression shorts?
Anonymous
4/6/23, 7:28 AM
Ah, the eleventh chapter's title, it tells me how the story will end. Also, you mentioned there's three chapters left. Is the last chapter same as epilogue?

4/6/23, 8:33 AM
@Anonymous Glad one of us knows how the story will end lmao. Do you have a theory?

Anonymous
4/6/23, 1:58 PM
@[Kyle Cage](/user/show/1756274) My theory is that in the end of the chapter, Ethan and Derek become the King of Rubber together. Since the title says "Kings" insteads of "King". Maybe in chapter 10, there's something unexpected happened when Todd was enslaving the military with his drones army. For example, Ethan (If he is still himself) took his chances to save his boyfriend, Derek (if he is enslaved), and gain the knowledge of how to defeat Todd. From there, they succeeded and enslave Todd in the final chapter.

4/6/23, 2:06 PM
@Anonymous Definitely better than todd deserves.

Anonymous
4/6/23, 2:18 PM
@[Kyle Cage](/user/show/1756274) I wonder if that is how the story will end? When you mentioned three chapters in your reply with BlindSeer0, I was confused because you mentioned two chapters title only, and the second last chapter is a finale of the series. Maybe that third chapter is a what-if chapter of what will happen if Todd couldn't be stopped by Ethan and Derek? (If the previous reply is indeed true, of course)