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Anonymous
1/31/20, 8:37 PM
Unexpectedly sad conclusion :(
Anonymous
1/31/20, 6:45 PM
As one who just found out they have colon cancer, a story like this becomes personal to me.
1/31/20, 6:10 PM
Good job man. A super hot and interesting start. Looking forward to the rest.
malskin
1/31/20, 8:50 AM
I enjoyed the new chapter, for me it would have been better if Tim was more involved, with Alex seeing him totally covered in leather standing or kneeling besides His Leather Master, before the conditioning started to kick in - Tim with his slutty evil grin
boi98229
1/31/20, 3:57 AM
i love the combination of leather, mind control, domination, and erotic enslavement. For me this set of story elements is hot beyond words. My problem with the story so far is that without magic as an element, the conversation during which Tim lost all control and apparently his memory is way too short and has almost no real elements of hypnosis or any other mind control technique. There is clear indication that the Dominant's voice is mesmerizing and somehow causing Tim to feel a strong sense of pleasure. Granted Tim is apparently not happy with his having to work, or the work he is doing, which takes up so much of his time and energy. That might provide some rationale for Tim wanting to make a major change in his life. But for those readers (certainly including me) who enjoy the process of seduction, an insidiously increasing degree of mind control, a slow shift in power from the submissive to the Dominant, this part of the story is way too short. It was kind of a wham bam, thank you Ma'am kind of experience. What you did write was fine; it was what wasn't there that made the story less interesting for me than it could have been. I will say that I do have a strong pre-existing bias towards stories that provide context and character for what comes next. Others who read erotic stories just want to get to the sex without a lot of preamble. Neither preference is wrong.
Anonymous
1/28/20, 3:05 AM
super hot
1/26/20, 9:34 AM
@A Voyeur Fan, I would like to get back to that story at some point. Are you on the Discord as I would prefer not to clutter your story with talk about Ass Assassin? I had the 'main plot' outlined, however, I start a new job next week and want to launch my game soon so Ass Assassin has slipped down my list of stories. It also potentially is epic in scope.
Anonymous
1/26/20, 6:27 AM
a chastity cage delivered to his house :)
1/26/20, 3:13 AM
Thank you for the feedback, Corinthian and Varlance By the way, @Varlance, have you got any desire to work together on writing more of the unexplored paths in A Game of Ass Assassin? That story's gone a while without an update, and there were plenty of ideas I had to continue the story!
1/26/20, 3:00 AM
I'm a huge fan of games which punish you for doing badly and this story is proceeding along similar lines, which I like very much! Lots of possibilities for where to take the story. Wearing plugs, increasing time in chastity, servicing guys from an app, having to tell online viewers how his rematches are going and what he's willing to do...