Recent Comments

Martin
1/31/20, 8:44 PM
> As one who just found out they have colon cancer, a story like this becomes personal to me. I'm sorry to hear that. I really hope your cancer can be cured and you get well again! Writing about a terminal illness is always troublesome because there's always somebody who's affected somehow. But it was a pivotal point of the story I want to tell. --- > Unexpectedly sad conclusion :( I'm happy that this came across. It's a bit of a hard thing to do, to convey emotion, if the protagonist from which perspective you tell the story from, is just a himbo. But there are going to be more chapters and I hope you'll find the actual conclusion a bit more satisfying! --- Thank you all for commenting! Keep 'em coming please!
Anonymous
1/31/20, 8:37 PM
Unexpectedly sad conclusion :(
Anonymous
1/31/20, 6:45 PM
As one who just found out they have colon cancer, a story like this becomes personal to me.
1/31/20, 6:10 PM
Good job man. A super hot and interesting start. Looking forward to the rest.
malskin
1/31/20, 8:50 AM
I enjoyed the new chapter, for me it would have been better if Tim was more involved, with Alex seeing him totally covered in leather standing or kneeling besides His Leather Master, before the conditioning started to kick in - Tim with his slutty evil grin
boi98229
1/31/20, 3:57 AM
i love the combination of leather, mind control, domination, and erotic enslavement. For me this set of story elements is hot beyond words. My problem with the story so far is that without magic as an element, the conversation during which Tim lost all control and apparently his memory is way too short and has almost no real elements of hypnosis or any other mind control technique. There is clear indication that the Dominant's voice is mesmerizing and somehow causing Tim to feel a strong sense of pleasure. Granted Tim is apparently not happy with his having to work, or the work he is doing, which takes up so much of his time and energy. That might provide some rationale for Tim wanting to make a major change in his life. But for those readers (certainly including me) who enjoy the process of seduction, an insidiously increasing degree of mind control, a slow shift in power from the submissive to the Dominant, this part of the story is way too short. It was kind of a wham bam, thank you Ma'am kind of experience. What you did write was fine; it was what wasn't there that made the story less interesting for me than it could have been. I will say that I do have a strong pre-existing bias towards stories that provide context and character for what comes next. Others who read erotic stories just want to get to the sex without a lot of preamble. Neither preference is wrong.
3350196006@qq.com
1/22/20, 3:44 PM
I want to eat their shit
SHITTY
1/15/20, 12:09 PM
I would like to eat stinking shit from THOSE GUARDS and ENRIQUE
MASTERs
1/15/20, 12:08 PM
Fucking hot, cummed twice over your story!
1/14/20, 7:39 PM
If only there was some kind of tag system, where by you could identify stories containing topics you don't like, so you don't need to read stories containing topics you don't like...