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12/18/19, 5:17 AM
Clickbaiting is not what the tags are for. Its fine as a hint in synopsis but as an actual tag, no, I think its wrong.
AgingAthlete
12/18/19, 3:31 AM
Thanks for the comments. Snuff: well, I did a bit of clickbaiting here. I frankly don't like snuff stories as they take things a bit too far for my tastes. That said, I liked the idea of *toying* with the concept, which is what this is. Apologies to anyone hoping for a death. That said, now I am thinking of an actual snuff story where the snuffed sub comes back as a very angry, and powerful, ghost top. How does that sound? Short: I was working towards a sort of 'O. Henry' kind of thing: short, sweet and surprising. Also, I thought the hidden dialog (see original story) might get tedious for the reader if it went too long.
12/18/19, 2:49 AM
I really love the idea and format of the story here, but I feel like it could be just a hair longer. Maybe there could be more hints to that "snuff" situation past of the suspect's refutal, or maybe there could be a more detailed sex scene near the end. Granted, the latter would be harder considering that you're only using dialogue to propel the story, but check out Wesley Bracken's "Letters from Prison" to see how he does it. Again, this is an awesome idea, and I hope you keep running with it!
12/17/19, 4:11 AM
Also nobody dies so why is Snuff included. It seems like a false tag.
12/17/19, 3:10 AM
Good update. I still like the trick on things.
Anonymous
12/10/19, 8:48 PM
loved this story, absolutely fantastic, altho every time i heard the name richard evans i couldn't help but think of rich evans from redlettermedia lol
11/15/19, 4:00 AM
Short simple mind control. A good short read. I really liked the one sided conversation.
Anonymous
10/26/19, 12:14 PM
great work. One of the best series on here so far.....
Anonymous
10/26/19, 11:59 AM
Fantastic. Even better than part 1....definitely the stuff I like to read.....
Anonymous
10/26/19, 11:44 AM
Wow. I will move right on to the other chapters. But this is amazingly hot. Your writing is phenomenal.