Recent Comments

Anonymous
4/5/20, 3:46 PM
This is "not my thing" but Damn, you made it sexy and so well written. I was smiling through out the story. Well done!
3/28/20, 2:35 AM
Love having the image of hunking Egyptian soldiers in loincloth and sandals. You can do so much with the set up. Looking forward to a mass conversion at some point. Grow that army of perfect Egyptian warriors!
3/27/20, 12:02 PM
I will continue doing my Pharaoh's bidding. You will witness the rest of my work. Let the stories set in and you will be prepared for His reawakening.
Slave Abdamelek
3/27/20, 11:59 AM
Thank you for the feedback guys. It's what keeps me writing and gives an idea how to best tantalize you.
3/27/20, 12:21 AM
Amazing idea and execution; to go from seer and author to part of the story. Really makes me want to enter a few stories on this site. Well done; so now that you're in your world what are you going to do for your Pharaoh?
nycboot
3/27/20, 12:00 AM
I love self-referential stories. :)
nycboot
3/26/20, 11:47 PM
I've re-read this chapter again. In the prologue the guy intones a prayer. But in this chapter, it's as if the pacing of the words is a prayer. Especially after Adom has shocked Raveed into submission. Beautiful!
3/26/20, 4:06 PM
A hot piece, great writing and interesting story but confusing as hell with no real resolution. I have no real idea what was going on! Still liked it though.
Mar 24, 2020
3/24/20, 11:51 PM
short, sweet with a hint of topical. Liked it.
3/9/20, 4:25 PM
Good start ! Can't wait to read more ;)