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7/16/20, 4:55 PM
I like it and would like it to be continued also I think you made a good story that could go in a lot of good directions if carefully plan it and pace yourself.
7/16/20, 11:17 AM
I'd suggest remove the final couple of paragraphs and write all those extra chapters... you do have an entire world takeover to write potentially. I hope you saved the directors cut of this as I'm sure it will be popular. editing is far worse than writing, so many loose threads to unpick. I rarely do werewolves as there are many many stories out there... this one is noteworthy.
Johnthedoe
7/16/20, 7:05 AM
Yeah my first attempt to write (I guess admitting I'm new kinda ruins the suspense) ended up being more of a learning experience than anticipated. I massively underestimated how much world building my brain was doing and by the time I realized the tangled web I'd created wouldn't fit in a space remotely close to 10k the deadline was too close for a complete rewrite. I literally hit publish less than two minutes before the deadline after spending the last four days trying to untangle and extract enough plot threads to make a smaller story. Editing is effectively nonexistent as no part of the story escaped having massive chunks ripped out and hastily stitched back together in my attempt at shrinking it down. I spent the last few hours before the deadline franticly cutting sentences apart and trying to taxidermy them back into something coherent when the sentence structure inevitably broke. I didn't completely succeed and I'm sure half of the tags apply to bits that didn't survive the unwinding. You guys wouldn't believe how much got removed before I even started putting it onto the site. The original beginning got axed completely and the ending doesn't even go in the direction it was originally going to. I told myself I was going to post a story about a swim team getting dicked into werewolves for the challenge, and despite my traitorous brain's valiant efforts to stop me that's what I did. Now I know to limit the amount of world building I allow my brain to do the next time I try to write something with a word count limit. After the challenge is over I'll put this shambling zombie of word vomit down and properly resurrect the story as the multiple chapters it should have been from the start.
Masters boy
7/15/20, 10:04 PM
very enjoyable well done as I love leather men made me cum a lot 👍 please add me to your fan club thank you Sir
7/15/20, 4:16 PM
please continue this
7/15/20, 3:48 PM
continue please
Anonymous
7/15/20, 2:03 PM
Really needs editing as sentences run on or stop abruptly with periods, commas and semi-colons mixed up. First paragraph makes no sense... There might be a great story in there but my brain hurt trying to get through the first lines and gave up.
Nutiper
7/15/20, 5:34 AM
This was so fun!! And how enjoyable it is to read a fairie story on this site that gets all the fey details just right.
7/14/20, 12:44 PM
I actually love this series so far. I hope to see the frat daddy reinstate the coach as a "proper" coach. Other than that, I had another idea if you would like. Essentially, each of these boys are in a program of study at the campus. I was thinking that since the boys of this frat are learning to become real men, the head faculty of each of their programs could also teach them respect and discipline by being appointed as the boys' masters for their duration of their program. This power over the boys is not to be advised, but to teach them how to become Men in their field of study, whether is be politics, or law enforcement, or a science of some kind. And at the end of every year or just before graduation the boy becomes the master of their appointed professor, not as a reward, but as a test to see what they've learned and will be graded by their professor. The idea is a little complex, following around a lot of people, but you can narrow that down by having multiple boys belonging to one faculty professor because im sure more than one boy is in the same program with one another. I just thought I'd contribute. im not very good at writing myself, but i offer ideas when i can.
ShitPig
7/14/20, 5:39 AM
Wow that was hot! Major is one of my favorite authors so seeing you added upon his trials through hell story had me excited from the start!! You did not disappoint!!! 🔥🔥🔥🔥