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11/24/20, 1:26 AM
just read thru all this in one sitting keep up the goid work.
11/13/20, 4:35 AM
this is hot, especially the chastity play and corruption
Anonymous
11/8/20, 9:45 PM
Decent idea, far better writing than most. Consider having them do some drinking, one of the four new guys tells a story about two others being in a game of gay chicken. The winner claims he's never been beaten More drinking, a spiral film, then group induction and suggestions. Darren or another can challenge the champion to a game of gay chicken, take it from there. Agree that talk of Alphas and Betas is off-putting. For now, I wouldn't worry about tightening and editing. Tell the story, get it out there, and do some tightening and editing later. Your writing is already well above-average. You can take some time to continue fleshing out the characters. I don't much like Ian's character right now, which means you've already built him enough to draw a reaction. Build the others as well. You're setting this up to be a slow burn, one of the more difficult genres but easily my favorite. You're writing a story, not a quick masturbation prompt.
11/4/20, 2:22 AM
such a great teaser of what's to come!
11/3/20, 7:13 AM
Just read the whole series.....I hope you are going to continue it.
Anonymous
10/31/20, 9:07 PM
thought there was gonna be more chapters?
10/26/20, 10:11 AM
F9's domination of Milo is so subtle, I love it. It doesn't take him over and dominate him all of a sudden, it slowly seduces him and convinces him to see things its way. It's a gradual sort of mind-control, and I love it.
10/25/20, 7:45 AM
you better keep writing, you have a real gift, i cant wait to see where your mind goes next
10/24/20, 4:55 PM
wow, you really write well and pace the story and the delivery of the facts beautifully. one of the best written and conceptualized stories I've read anywhere. i found myself wanting to be Slave Ian throughout the storyline. and you really turned me on mentally and physically, my dick was throbbing and i couldnt leave it alone while i was reading! i hope you plan on writing a lot more, i did read your other story listed here too, also very good.. you may be my new favorite!
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10/19/20, 2:17 AM
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