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12/4/20, 7:26 PM
@Viridian Ahaha now that would be quite a challenge XD Thank you for the comment!
12/4/20, 1:22 PM
The premise is good and the execution is fun. Plenty of potential for expansion. Consider doing the songs. :-)
12/4/20, 5:19 AM
@zimdog Thanks man! Appreciate the comment :)
12/4/20, 2:52 AM
Lots of potential for future chapters. A few minor typo issues, but easily read through. Looking forward to more.
Anonymous
12/4/20, 1:43 AM
Thanks Evan!
Evan
12/4/20, 1:28 AM
Creative use of the old classic. Great job. Congrats on your first story.
12/3/20, 10:03 PM
What a wonderful, intimately written tale, friend. I adore the dialogue. Very intimate and brings across character well. This is a lovely and sexy piece.
12/3/20, 3:39 PM
Thanks man! I didn't really wanna do Chapters as my first story but instead just replease it all as one whole thing. Definetly noted though! Glad you enjoyed! :D
12/3/20, 3:28 PM
I love the premise of Willy Wonka but I think I would have enjoyed more detail about the tortures and some more kink. These were more like foreplay. and your idea is so good, I think you could have made each of the "winners" it's own chapter with character background and maybe even combine several of the factory products: Te rubberising compound paired with immobilisation, or cum deprivation and going from monster cock to micro-penis or vice versa... So many possibilities. And the Dom who operates the factory re-shaping Charlie into his boy, then with each chapter, elevates him to his equal and partner. Wonderful and I hope you do expand it
Gasuda
12/3/20, 9:13 AM
i hope we get to read more of this one!