Recent Comments

2/10/21, 2:43 AM
this was good. have to admit the first few paragraphs i wanted to jump in and save him
2/10/21, 1:14 AM
I love it, so much potential! The old big macho dad as a bottom and the thin son dominating... perfection, big sub small top is my jam <3 If you feel like it, you can try also to add feet, if not, its ok, I would love to read more!
2/10/21, 12:50 AM
well done! please continue!
2/10/21, 12:30 AM
I really enjoyed this first chapter and look forward to where you take the story next.
2/9/21, 8:49 PM
really awsome start to the story, looking forward to the next chapter.
2/9/21, 8:34 PM
Love this. Can't wait to read more. Please continue.
nycboot
2/9/21, 8:28 PM
Interesting start. Like a "message movie" I consider this a "political story" in that the point seems to be less about sex or mind control but more about teaching tolerance of gayness. Your writing makes readers want to strongly empathize with Vince so I'm all for him screwing his dad both in mind and in body. But to keep that empathy don't make him a crazed son seeking ultimate revenge. Make his actions and thoughts just enough to make his father 1) accept gayness and 2) be a real father and support his son to the max.
2/9/21, 8:05 PM
Very well written ! The backstory and the motivation of the main character is very well established. looking forward to more chapters !
Anonymous
2/9/21, 6:22 PM
I Like the start, I hope things keep going well
boi98229
2/9/21, 6:49 AM
Nicky is still a virgin and still he is totally screwed! i understand his dilemma though, not wanting to give too much personal information about himself, and feeling so strongly the arousal, the powerful need, to obey and be dominated. i hope you decide to add to this hot story at some point! Thanks so much.