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3/20/21, 3:36 PM
Take all the time you need. We don't want writer burnout. For Eli, might I suggest not dumbing him down? Maybe he's the one who partially brake away from his reprogramming.
3/20/21, 3:35 PM
Superb isn't the right word, "fanfreakingtastic" is much much better! You are truly talented and I'm grateful I get to enjoy the fruits of your creative labor. Mars does seem like a good idea sometimes doesn't it? Hopefully the writing process is both cathartic and enjoyable for you so sending good vibes your way. This IS my favorite story on here!
3/20/21, 9:09 AM
the wait is definitely worth it! you are killing it right now,this is one of my favorite series on this site these days. shame that I need to wait for the next chapter now xD I would read that whole thing in one sitting in a heartbeat. I probably will once it's completed keep up the good work,we appreciate it
3/20/21, 8:27 AM
I'm intrigued on how things will develop with Eli, I enjoy when smart characters are the enthralled ones and are not dumbed Down, there is a lot of ways to play with someone who is smart having so many confusing feelings, and It's very intriguing. I also gotta say that I really enjoyed how you described his utter confusion and Jealousy, I think his envy is a very strong defining character trait to explore and what I enjoyed the most is that so far aside from obviously Vincent, Eli is the most fully realized character to me, down to his feelings rather than fully changing just kinda switching his hatred and anger for Vincent into his father and also discovering how much he hates Erik makes me wonder if Vincent might use Eli to torture Erik if he ever were to "reward" Eli for anything, he'd be spiteful enough to get his kicks not only at obeying his baby brother, but also making his older brother suffer as well, middle child syndrome taken to extremes.
3/19/21, 11:12 PM
Great idea with the Aware mode. And very hotly told. This chapter made me like Erik. But watching him be aware of what he is to become was a great punishment that I enjoyed seeing. Actually, the only punishment I can see is for him to always be in the Aware mode or else he's enjoying it. So it is interesting how this will play out. I look forward to the next one (kind of bummed out I caught up and have to wait now)
3/17/21, 9:25 AM
As usual an amazing chapter, looks like this is proper revenge, but seems like Erik hits our protagonist’s nerves the hardest, I wonder if Eli’s punishment will be more relaxed than Erik’s
3/17/21, 2:19 AM
I've been waiting for a story like this for ages! If you didn't plan it from the start I'd like to nominate Sam and Mac for enslavement as well
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3/15/21, 6:11 PM
Welcome back! I'm glad the pharaoh reestablished his presence! Looking forward to the next parts
3/14/21, 6:42 AM
Please keep going. There must be so much more that can be told. The Father and his friends, The Father and The Brothers and there has to be an obscure cousin somewhere, LOL!