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Anonymous
10/10/21, 1:43 PM
Option 1. Will be fun to see what the frat bros do in this based upon their experiences in the past games. Given how Greg got somewhat of what he wanted and can get more into his ideal body by doing this. And how frequently Prideful Trevor gets fucked into submission, just seeing his reactions to being constantly emasculated and disrespected is fun. Doesn't even have to be substantial him just saying "No! You will respect my Authoritaeee" as he gets fucked by a transformed frat boy in the background of a scene is a nice thought. **This is the one that has my vote.** Option 2: Has a chance to just be a fun time, ESPECIALLY with the random permanent trick effect. Option 3: Demons are fun in these stories. Especially if someone like Dan makes a deal to get a fully functional pussy and how that could affect the game and his life. Or Trevor making a deal to get a temporary nub and then get emasculated by one large rod demon, or if a Demon Trevor thinks he can control outsmarts him and permanently or temporarily takes something from him, ect. A fun time all around.

easdf
10/14/21, 3:03 PM
@Anonymous Why punishing Trevor though? He's so sweet
10/13/21, 2:17 AM
Well we've definitely sped up too quickly but it's pretty clear that the gay spiral component can't really realistically happen in this situation all things equal. I have to wonder if it might be better to include the fantasy element of hypnosis ear buds constantly in or during sleep since you're pushing for it to just happen through abuse. We've got pretty far away from pup play too now and I still think it would have been better to try a good cop approach and punish Bright and Ruby while theyre in headspace. Maybe trying to build a headspace for the officer while in bondage might be a good pathway.

10/13/21, 2:49 AM
....dude can you just go elsewhere? These scathing comments are killing my desire to use this site and post anything. If your not enjoying this why not go elsewhere?@Astradei

10/13/21, 10:23 AM
I don't know what your goal is here nitpicking everything about the story. Me personally this is one of my most favorite series I've read on here and I think the author has done a fantastic job in displaying a realistic, plausible breakdown of the police man. It simply hasn't shifted from one chapter of the police man resisting and the very next chapter he's full on pup, it's a slow burn and has been paying off in great style. Also looking at your page, I don't see a single piece written by you, so who are you to judge? If the author is reading this, you are very talented in what you do, and you have a gift. I love this story and so do many others. Block out uneducated hate like this and do what you do boo :)@Astradei

10/14/21, 4:10 AM
Feedback doesn't have emotion behind it in this context. I recognize its strangely common on this website to post praise but not actual constructive criticism or feedback on content, but this kind of stuff is basic for anyone writing. Being upset at the assessment, analysis, and thoughts of others will avail you in no way. Imagine if I actually gave an insult or some such. A professional critic would be well over a hundred times harsher than anything I wrote. Yet, they're dealt with by writers of all sorts constantly with a smile. Feedback means someone finds value in your construction. Otherwise they'd not waste their words. @Alpha Artemis Reporting someone because they made a comment you didn't like based on their perspective of something you wrote and posted publicly... This makes little sense. There is a comment system and it is intended for use. It isn't trolling to make a comment on something you read. It isn't scathing or hostile either. Far more people than comment will read your work. Many will have thoughts. If you heard their thoughts and it was disagreeable would that alone break you? You value your work and are proud of it. The moment anyone reveals anything to the public it is subjected to scrutiny. That isn't harassment.

Martin
10/14/21, 7:45 AM
@Astradei @Artemis I understand perfectly well that you want to get feedback to your stories and of course that the feedback is constructive. I understand that comments like the ones written by Astradei can be received as annoying, however, he takes a lot of time writing them and he obviously spent quite some time reading your stories and to think about them. As they're not offensive or break any rules, I will not remove them. However, I'd ask you, Astradei, to be aware that there is a human being on the other side and that they put a lot of personal energy and time into these stories. Stories are our children, we're proud of them, but in the end, they're short stories focused around sexual kinks. We authors want to please our readers and ourselves with those stories. So we should not expect those stories to be without flaws. Constructive criticism is more than welcome, but please make sure to give the author the feeling that his work is appreciated and don't be too nitpicky, ok? It would really be a loss for us all, if authors leave just because they have the feeling that their work is not appreciated. /edit: What I can confirm that Astradei has been around for quite some time. He didn't create an account just to troll, he's obviously spending a lot of time on the site. His comments are in general more on the harsh side, not just for Artemis' stories. Again, I'm not going to delete these comments, but I'd like to ask you, Astradei, to be more empathic to the authors and consider that they do this for fun and for the benefit of us all, ok?

10/14/21, 3:02 PM
While I don't particularly see my comments as harsh or cruel so much as observations based on the context, it is true that I don't go around sharing praise all the time and just get to the point. Enough people do that after all and I rarely remember to even comment. Even so, since you've asked it of me, I'll attempt to be less blunt as my goal obviously isn't to denigrate anyone. @Martin
10/14/21, 2:51 PM
I am liking how Christian resistance is being eaten away. how he is accepting his name Skippy
Oct 11, 2021
10/14/21, 11:18 AM
Hot damn, what a story.
10/14/21, 10:59 AM
As someone who reads all your stories, it genuinely felt to me like @Astradei was stalking your comments. It's good to hear that that's not the case. I haven't gotten a chance to read 7 and 8 yet but I'm really looking forward to them and wanted you to know that your stories are appreciated and I'd be sad if you left.
Oct 11, 2021
10/14/21, 10:20 AM
can't even finish reading it in one sitting if you know what I mean ;)
Ben
10/14/21, 6:06 AM
I wonder if he'll reverse this or make the dean horny for him too ;)
10/13/21, 7:43 PM
option 1. I love the cock shrinking/sph elements to the story. i hope Greg ends up with a tiny cock.
10/13/21, 5:24 AM
An interesting plot twist.

10/13/21, 5:29 AM
@Cutlerfan as long as you don't call me M. Night Ramalamadingdong, we're good. 😂

10/13/21, 6:25 PM
@Uncle Arctos No, I like a bit of a twist but nothing as extreme as M. Night's work.
10/13/21, 6:14 PM
I was indulging in a short self-edging session this morning, but this chapter made me cum hard unwillingly. So… Well done, dear writer.