Recent Comments

7/11/25, 5:27 AM
Wow! The horniest scene yet. Great writing here, @NeonDemon. There's a lot to unpack and speculate about. First, if there was any expectation that Master was going to allow Jamie a truly free choice, you can forget about that. Master's M.O. is always to tilt the playing field in his favor, and he does it Masterfully here. Then there's the revelation about the origins of powers. Using dark matter and dark energy as the moving forces was a stroke of genius. It's NeonDemon's hyperdive. Another good one is the "half awakening." That presents a lot of options for Jamie's future. And that unseen second crack in Jamie's power dam? Where will that lead us? I suspect Mentat put it there, knowing the League is going to lose Jamie to Master, why not make him a time bomb that could seriously damage Myriad’s Network? It's not as if the League leadership cares if innocents get killed or injured when he goes off. To the contrary, it fits ever so nicely into their manipulations to keep the populace fearful and dependent on the League. But only NeonDemon knows for sure where it came from. Maybe he'll tell us before he's done. Anyway, this is a terrific job of leaving us in suspense and wanting more. You hear me, NeonDemon? I want more!

Anonymous
7/11/25, 9:12 PM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) 100%, there's no way that Mentat was unaware that Jamie's heroism was slowly corroded away. I mean, if I were Mentat, I'd do the same

7/12/25, 4:06 AM
@Anonymous My theory is that on his recent check up visit, Mentat clocked how thoroughly Master was embedding himself in Jamie's mind, and that he was pretty much a lost cause. So he created a time bomb with the mental power limiting dam by adding the new crack. It at least has the potential to strike a powerful blow against Myriad and his Network.
7/11/25, 9:05 PM
Horny and Suspenseful! Talk about getting fucked by your own suit. Even if Master is really guiding it all. What a hot scene. Jamie is truly a walking wet dream with those muscles in that tight suit! As I was reading it, I didn't think his conversion would be like this. Hidden in his bedroom. I was anticipating something grandeur. Then at the end it was clear this was just his preliminary. Yet what a cliffhanger. I doubt that the league initially intended to make him a trojan horse. That dam has clearly been there for a long while. But it seems that may happen with or without their interference. Most likely they wanted to shape him into a weapon once he was conditioned enough. Controlling the flow of his powers. The next chapter is going to be so exciting!!
4/20/25, 7:51 PM
Next part coming soon!

7/11/25, 5:16 PM
@[Sam Wilson](/user/show/10048195) Still waiting. Hope the next part comes soon.
7/11/25, 4:34 AM
Thanks so much guys! I've edited it to fix the formatting so hopefully it will be more readable. Just finished chapter 2 waiting for approval.
7/10/25, 10:50 PM
Excellently written and white-hot. Loved the competing narratives.

7/11/25, 3:54 AM
@[DaymionMC](/user/show/10033419) I'm planning to use Ollie and Ed as a framing narrative, so they'll be back but not right away! Hope that there's some more characters and hot action that grabs you though. Part 2 has some set up/exposition for Ed as a younger man and the situation he finds himself then Part 3 is...pretty hot, I think.. White-hot? I really value that compliment. Thank you for the comment.
7/11/25, 1:31 AM
This was such a great chapter! Fantastic writing too!
MakoTako
7/10/25, 3:58 PM
Cant wait for the next part!
7/10/25, 5:29 AM
Oh, the things that await this guy, I hope he gets to enjoy some of them :)

7/10/25, 11:00 AM
@[luisadjani](/user/show/971980) A lot of the parts of this story have already been released on this website. Feel free to checkout. The pledge is in for a treat ;)
7/10/25, 6:02 AM
love love love the dual narratives. very intense and exciting!

7/10/25, 8:03 AM
@[Antimony723](/user/show/10011682) Haha, felt like to much exposition to be giving the reader without some sex. Thank you so much for the comment - really means a lot to me to get one.