Recent Comments

Evan
4/9/22, 6:56 AM
Jasper is really taking to his pet training. I loved the emersion of his submissive side even if it caught Rhys's attention. That said, being so desperate to cum can have that effect so that's a nice little head-canon for Rhys to not be too suspicious. I absolutely LOVE the Golden condition. What an awesome way to introduce some vulnerability to some of the Coins and turn a bit of that submissive desperate need to cum, and loss of control back on its head for them. Just as a way to not be in control of yourself and fall into base instinct of needing to fuck and cum is very hot to me. Even more so when contrasted against their rigid control and protocol normally. The further to fall, I suppose. You are both amazing authors and more impressive is collaboratively writing this. Writing with someone else is even trickier. The voices are distinctive for characters but in no way reveal who is writing whom. I have my theories on the Golden Lattice Ceremony being some sort of debutant-esque event to celebrate and present a new pet, ending in everyone in attendence using or teasing or pleasing the guest of honour in an orgy or something like that. Excited to see how Jasper takes that if I'm right. His programming by Aris is really jumping ahead after using his rig. I fear if he learns of it he may question Jasper's true heart (that I think exists) and whether his affection is just the suggestions and not based on his original feelings. Damn you both tugging at my heart strings.

Cuddle-switch
4/10/22, 3:04 AM
@Evan I’m so glad to hear you are enjoying our story. You are picking up on pretty much all of the important points that we were putting down. For example, yes, the Aureum vesanium is one of the ways we hope to show a type of weakness in the Coins. Perhaps the magnification of desirable qualities can have unintended consequences?? As a new writer, it gives me all the feels to know that you are liking this enough to be reading this thoroughly, and are paying attention to both subtext and the subtle cues from the characters. I’ll be very curious to know what you think of the Golden Lattice Ceremony. Please feel free to comment to your heart’s content. Also, we will continue to pull on those heartstrings as long as you consent to us doing so.

4/10/22, 3:08 AM
@Evan I also really appreciate you taking the time to give us such thorough comments! It's really such a joy as a writer to get the chance to hear from readers (especially friends!) about what they think about the work! :3 I think our preferences align pretty closely with yours on a lot of the decisions we've made that are meant to be sensual or play on kinks. At the end of the day, it's been a bad beginning for Rhys and Jasper. We'll have to see how things turn out for them over time! Thanks again for encouraging us to write!
4/9/22, 3:48 AM
I say Jonathan, and it would be pretty cool if he actually did stuff with his feet like worship or sniffing

Rubber_Lover14
4/10/22, 1:36 AM
@Mrpomf Yeah, I cant wait to involve more foot worship and stuff like that. And just generally kinkier things. Also, if u wanna see them, I've added images of all the characters to Getting Treatment. So if you'd like to see them all, then you can revisit the chapter ^^ I'm not sure if their on view yet though
4/8/22, 1:57 AM
This was amazing! I'm sorry I didn't finish it before the contest ended. I identified very strongly with Roman, even though I'm not Dom, and not exclusively top at all. I don't think I fall on either side of Dom/sub; not even as a switch. But enough of the problems I've had with trying to explore BDSM are similar to his, that it was easy to be in his head as the story progressed. The steps of acceptance he reached seemed familiar, too. The real joy for me was reading the hypnosis sessions, especially the first. I envied Roman the depth he achieved, felt all the pleasure he did, and I'm definitely taking notes from Quinn when I start trying to hypnotize guys myself. Granted my perception was filtered through Roman's, but he seemed to be a perfect tist. And yes, like others who've commented, I really appreciated a hypno story that very much warrants that "realistic" tag. Yours might well be the most realistic I've read on here. Thank you! This was great, and I'll be thinking about everything it stirs up for me for weeks.

4/10/22, 12:57 AM
@meatheadosis Thank you so much for this kind, thoughtful comment! I'm glad the different feelings and themes I was working with were something you could relate to, even if it wasn't exactly your experience. I set out to write as realistic a story as I could while trying to keep the inductions readable and fluid. This kind of induction is closest to my own style as a hypnotist, and I wanted to deal with conflict but not coming out of the nefarious intentions of the hypnotists for his subject, this time. I'm so glad that you enjoyed it and that it felt true and good to you! Thanks for taking the time to comment -- it's definitely great encouragement for future writing!
Martin
4/9/22, 7:13 PM
Die Story wird richtig spannend. Ich freu mich schon zu lesen, wie es weitergeht! :hot_pepper:

SklaveTimm
4/9/22, 9:38 PM
@Martin Danke für das positive Feedback. Ich habe nochmal am 1 und 2 Teil (Tite und Layout) ein wenig gefeilt. Und den inzwischen fertigen 3. Teil der Erzählung konnte ich auch schon hochladen.:sweat_drops:
Martin
4/8/22, 4:53 PM
Die Story ist wirklich geil, gratuliere. Aber das Deutsch ist stellenweise etwas komisch. "unbescholtener Schwanz"? Was soll das denn sein?! :)

SklaveTimm
4/8/22, 5:33 PM
@Martin Upps, da hat die Autokorrektur eingegriffen. Ist beseitigt.

Martin
4/8/22, 6:07 PM
@SklaveTimm Vergiss nicht, dass Du nach dem Editieren die neue Version auch wieder "Publishen" musst. Sonst bleibt die alte Version stehen.
Justme
4/8/22, 4:31 PM
Super amazing story can not wait for the next segment. I love the pace please don't speed it up.

4/8/22, 4:33 PM
@Justme Thank you. I am working on the third part but it's coming along slowly.
Rubber_Lover14
4/8/22, 3:19 PM
This is a great story. A wonderful read. I really hope this is continued. Just imagine all the kinky toys and tools they could have with magic. It would be amazing to see, but seeing as this is a commission, I expect this is a one shot. Its a shame we probably wont see how things go from here, but it was still an amazing story. Good work! I cant wait to see what your future stories will be!

4/8/22, 3:22 PM
@Rubber_Lover14 it's actually a multi chapter commission, so you're in luck :)

Rubber_Lover14
4/8/22, 3:35 PM
@Jack Parker :heart_eyes: That's great! I cant wait to see what comes next, if you'll add more kinks, and what Draco has in mind. ill make sure to keep an eye out for any future chapters. Thanks for letting me know :grin:
4/8/22, 3:49 AM
What a *lovely* story. The romance shone through beautifully, and I love how you managed to make the sex a real expression of their love as much as it was their lust. Plus, as far as the lust goes, I absolutely go nuts for visceral descriptions of what it feels like to be split by an impossibly huge cock, and you nailed it. The visual of Tobias’ stomach bulging around it will stay with me for some time to cum. Nicely, nicely done!

4/8/22, 5:39 AM
I’ve rarely gotten to write stomach-bulging-by-cock in my stories on this site so far, so I relished in it. I’m glad I communicated how visceral it is, even from the top’s perspective! And I’m glad you felt the intimacy between them. I think that’s vital. @Noam de Pluma
4/6/22, 7:25 PM
Just a note: You use the term "pants" in its US sense throughout despite characters being British. A command in the UK to "Take your pants off will you" would see someone remove their underwear.

4/6/22, 7:34 PM
@Envious George JK Rowling uses the term pants in that same book to refer to slacks and not underwear.

4/6/22, 9:50 PM
@Jack Parker Jack, while I do like the story, the above is only one of quite a few Americanisms scattered all the way through. While you might hear some of them used in everyday conversation in Britain, it’d be unlikely anyone would use quite so many οf them in one go. If they did, the intention would almost certainly be ironic.

Anonymous
4/6/22, 9:55 PM
@U.K. guy I am sure you are correct but I am using the word pants in the same manner JK Rowling did in the same book. Twice.

4/6/22, 10:02 PM
@U.K. guy it logged me out for some reason, but this was me making this reply. @U.K. guy I am sure you are correct but I am using the word pants in the same manner JK Rowling did in the same book. Twice.

4/7/22, 8:21 AM
@Jack Parker I do not remember JK Rowling using pants to mean trousers, but other than the occasional "Merlin's pants!" exclaimations which definitely did mean underwear I do not remember her using the term much otherwise. Rather than use the ambiguous 'pants' or the technically recognised but practically unused on different sides of the Atlantic terms like 'trousers' or 'slacks'; JK Rowling tended to dress her characters in jeans, probably to avoid confusion or potential edits for international audiences.

4/7/22, 8:31 AM
@Envious George Page 322 and 323 of the kindle version where Peeves was threatening not to let anyone pass unless they lit their pants on fire and then Neville coming in and looking for a fresh pair of pants in his trunk. Also, I am curious if this level of editing and colloquium checks are being done with each and every porn story on here? Because I am not looking to write proper British language, I am writing porn to get people off. I used a word the actual author used twice in the same book, so I am not sure why this one use here requires three different comments. I am not British, I am not interested in writing proper British, I am interested in writing the hottest story I can. But that being said, I used the word in the same way she did in the same book.

4/7/22, 2:07 PM
Sorry I asked you to post this. I thought people might enjoy so hot porn, not decide to nitpick your American English. I’ll understand if you don’t want to continue this story but hope you’ll at least continue it for me. @Jack Parker As for the rest of you - nitpick the man’s writing when you’ve actually contributed something of substance of your own. Unbelievable.

4/8/22, 2:19 AM
Everyone can be right! :) I bought a HP book as a souvenir while on vacation in London and it’s slightly different; in that it uses the common English vernacular for things like pants, rubbish bin (trash can) etc. Loved the story, hope you continue it despite whatever all this was. Lol

4/8/22, 3:53 AM
@tmfdc You're correct. The American printings of the Harry Potter novels were "Americanized". The first book even had its title changed from "Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone" to "Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone." I've always found the dog fights over whose dialect of English is correct and the many, many internet pissing matches that have been spawned over this to be petty and trite. There's much better things to be mad about in this world.
David
4/7/22, 11:19 PM
SO 🔥 my dick waits for each chapter.

4/8/22, 12:25 AM
@David lol thanks man!