Recent Comments

Anonymous
2/12/22, 11:13 AM
Cute and hot, but the ending is far too abrupt, this needs a second chapter!

2/13/22, 4:39 PM
I've been wanting to add one for a long time, but this never got much traffic until now. I guess I'll have to get to work!

Martin
2/13/22, 6:06 PM
@Taiga Star You just have to publish on the "right" outlet :)

2/13/22, 7:07 PM
@Martin I think I found it, then!
2/13/22, 4:49 PM
This is by far the best Jack Parker story yet!!! So hot on so many levels.
2/13/22, 2:50 PM
I really want to see where this goes - your stories are the best.
2/13/22, 6:03 AM
This is off to a great start! Really sexy premise and I can't help but wonder if Steve isn't taking advantage of the situation a little bit. I hope you decide to write more!
2/13/22, 4:02 AM
Very well done! I was secretly hoping that Steve was really the original guy and this was his elaborate scenario for getting the narrator to accept his new life.
ejaculaTe
2/13/22, 3:28 AM
Always boner-inducing fiction from you, and this series did not disappoint.
2/13/22, 2:06 AM
Liking this so far.
Evan
2/12/22, 10:33 PM
Another great story of finding and accepting desires. I tend to gloss over the feminine speak, personally, but I get that adds to the former straight-guy's humiliation. I particularly love how he thinks he wants to stop but finds his body overriding him and a deep desire he needs filled. And submitting to it and becoming a whore and loving it. And sure looks like he'll be in heaven, and busy. Thanks for another great series!
2/12/22, 9:19 PM
This was so lurid and funny. Super hot.
Anonymous
2/12/22, 11:55 AM
Wow, I'm *so* not proud of Mark because Mark isn't a real person but a fictional character. Equally true, this was a tease, tease, tease story that never built up or lived up. [As Marcia points out, in 17 chapters, you have one chapter where Mark and Steve has sex as sub and dom](https://sickofitradlz.blogspot.com/2022/02/dog-days-are-beginning-is-awful-online.html). One chapter. Tease, tease, tease. She's also right that Steve needs to have some conflict and not be so damn passive for this to have any real drama. There is none. It's a bad first draft that another writer needs to grab and rework because the roots were there but it was not pulled off. This is the sort of bland Gary Marshall Exit to Eden bull where you pretend you're going to explore dom and sub but then cop out because you're too damn cowardly and instead want to tease. The immaturity level of this piece is shocking. the author was offered good criticism throughout the posting of chapters (which went up first at Nifty) but ignored the suggestions -- whether a dom or a sub was explaining it to him, the author ignored it. His story would have greatly benefited from him utilzing feedback. As it stands, this is a cock tease story that never lives up to its promise and treats the dom and sub experience as something to sneer at and escape from. Mark and Steve are suburban Karens trying to be 'hip' but in the end just want it vanila. Take that nosnene to a site that doesn't explore s&m themes. What a cowardly story and, considering the audience here, what an insulting one. I'm a dom and proud of it. My sub and I don't need to run from who we are or work through our 'kinks' to be 'normal.' This story basically is as insulting as gay conversion therapy.

Martin
2/12/22, 4:01 PM
Whatever your issues are with the story and the author, please keep it civil. Much of your text seem to be targetted at offending the author (the so called review you've linked to is even worse making me think you're the same person). But a genuine critique should never ever target and offend the author. I don't want to comment on whether your gripes are justified or not, everyone is entitled to their own opinion. But please remember that this story has been offered for free. You knew the story before, so you just came here to vent your anger to another outlet. This is saying more about yourself than what you claim to know about the author of the story.