Recent Comments

4/3/22, 5:02 PM
Love the set up to this story. You did really well with your first shot at this, and I think with more practice you could write something great. I wanted to like this story but there was little focus on the transformations and I had a hard time imagining it. I love when a story sucks you in and lets you believe you are part of it. I think you have the potential to do just that.
4/3/22, 12:59 PM
You could take a bit more time to tell the story, but it‘s hot, and I like it. Stories about jocks and bros are the best. <3
Evan
4/3/22, 11:11 AM
Damn. What an ending to this chapter! So hot, electric. Great turn around, consequences, and fun. And a little bit of shame to go with it.
Evan
4/3/22, 10:05 AM
This is my favourite chapter. It has elements of their new dynamic but also really sweet and a bit romantic.
4/2/22, 10:29 PM
I love when a jock gets turned into a little slut. Great story.
Jerry
4/2/22, 6:25 PM
Very nice.
4/2/22, 6:58 AM
Very hot. thank you for sharing your story. Look forward to the chapter!
3/30/22, 2:50 PM
This is such a fun world! You’ve really fleshed out the characters, and now they have motivations, plans of action, ideas… they feel real, and this world feels full of possibility. I’m excited to see more.

4/2/22, 5:06 AM
@Soren Fitz Thank you! I have some fun angles to this world I have yet to reveal as well!
Anonymous
4/1/22, 7:13 PM
Don't particularly care about the preachy crypto bullshit but I'm glad this story is being continued

4/2/22, 5:05 AM
Oh, well, thanks for letting me know you felt the crypto explanation came across as preachy! I just thought I needed to explain how the CPU power necessary (and therefore, energy consumption) had increased so drastically that while Jack was able to mine bitcoin years ago, now he'd need to lease a server farm. The Djinn were commenting on it overly harshly because they know of something better that works for them up in their higher dimension. The Djinn do not necessarily get everything right.
2/10/22, 8:43 PM
WOW! What a great chapter. I love how they fought for dominance and the tables were turned. Is there a chance for a third chapter??? The story feels complete and at the same time there is a lot of room for more chapters if you like.

2/10/22, 9:29 PM
@BrzNLA .... I'm going to admit: there will be a third chapter. You have @Hypnothrill to thank for that. I had absolutely no intention in writing a third chapter. I had planned an epilogue. But after reader an early draft of Chapter 2, @Hypnothrill gave me reason to expand the epilogue into a full chapter. It won't be anything you guys are expecting. I don't want to say more. I would rather let the chapter surprise and speak for itself. It may take me a week before it's posted because as I said, I never planned to write it. And now I have to find time to crank the finale out.

4/2/22, 1:26 AM
@rubbrsome I can't wait for your next chapter! This is probably one of your best works honestly.