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5/8/22, 8:14 PM
Wow! Great story! Always good when a male is reduced to his most base animal nature, needing to do nothing other than obey, make himself an object men's most carnal lust and obsess on draining male cock! No benefit in protesting and none in fighting what he needs and will eventually want to become. Hot! Wanked throughout the whole thing!
5/8/22, 12:13 AM
Ah, that part did get lost, hiw jack get locked out of the b and b if later chapters say he lived with his mom Then again least of intentionally fuzzy details Small town gay circle of firemen...who fear pda? South is weird. News at 7
5/7/22, 9:22 PM
Great job on the progressive dumbing down and how he kept progressively changing and not being able to stop it. Really looking forward to the next part.
5/7/22, 6:30 PM
*Damn,* this was hot! I'm super into crushfucking and the cum inflation was amazing. Thanks for posting this. I really enjoyed it.
5/7/22, 1:51 PM
Not only is the story excellently crafted, but the world building and lore begin to shine. The story is undoubtedly sexy and our protagonist is just such a treat. I liked the shift in focus and that Finn is on the edges but not yet back into focus. The djinn consciousness was a very interesting surprise, but most of all, you started talking in gaming/mmo language and you totally got me there! I hope you continue building this up as it has a lot of promise for fun.
JR
5/7/22, 10:50 AM
Love this story. I can’t wait until the next chapter.
5/7/22, 10:03 AM
Sorry I didn't get a chance to comment earlier when you shared the draft with me, but I think this is really good stuff! I always like a good personality change and dumbing down story, and I think this one is well-done, giving us a good feel for John's transformation into Johnnie. I only had two suggestions: 1) Be more generous with the paragraph breaks. When you have dialogue from two different characters in the same paragraph, it becomes hard to tell them apart. 2) Sometimes the dialogue seems less "dumbed down" and more "working-class characters from a 1950s movie." So just think carefully about your word choices. The story ends up going to some really hot places, so I'd expect a lot of positive reader feedback coming your way!
5/7/22, 7:48 AM
I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. So happy that you have plans for continuing this story. Definitely enjoyed the exploration of how djinns and their powers work in this universe. I would certainly enjoy a spin-off chapter that explores what other djinns have done if you ever wanted to take a break from the main story-line. Can't wait to see more!
5/6/22, 4:43 AM
Yay! The boys found their place and Jack found how to have fun with toys. And having said that, how fantastic is it that the story evokes such tenderness and brings forth such emotion? In the end they found love in their sharing of themselves in the way that works for them and reality shifts to allow it. Brilliant.

5/7/22, 7:33 AM
@Essex Thank you so much for your continued support! Jack of Hearts of loads of fun to write for sure!
5/6/22, 6:21 PM
I'm excited for another round of this super fun story! πŸ˜€πŸ˜€

5/6/22, 11:32 PM
@NeedControlling Thanks! πŸ‘ŠπŸΌ