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5/7/22, 1:51 PM
Not only is the story excellently crafted, but the world building and lore begin to shine. The story is undoubtedly sexy and our protagonist is just such a treat. I liked the shift in focus and that Finn is on the edges but not yet back into focus. The djinn consciousness was a very interesting surprise, but most of all, you started talking in gaming/mmo language and you totally got me there! I hope you continue building this up as it has a lot of promise for fun.
JR
5/7/22, 10:50 AM
Love this story. I can’t wait until the next chapter.
5/7/22, 10:03 AM
Sorry I didn't get a chance to comment earlier when you shared the draft with me, but I think this is really good stuff! I always like a good personality change and dumbing down story, and I think this one is well-done, giving us a good feel for John's transformation into Johnnie. I only had two suggestions: 1) Be more generous with the paragraph breaks. When you have dialogue from two different characters in the same paragraph, it becomes hard to tell them apart. 2) Sometimes the dialogue seems less "dumbed down" and more "working-class characters from a 1950s movie." So just think carefully about your word choices. The story ends up going to some really hot places, so I'd expect a lot of positive reader feedback coming your way!
5/7/22, 7:48 AM
I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. So happy that you have plans for continuing this story. Definitely enjoyed the exploration of how djinns and their powers work in this universe. I would certainly enjoy a spin-off chapter that explores what other djinns have done if you ever wanted to take a break from the main story-line. Can't wait to see more!
5/6/22, 4:43 AM
Yay! The boys found their place and Jack found how to have fun with toys. And having said that, how fantastic is it that the story evokes such tenderness and brings forth such emotion? In the end they found love in their sharing of themselves in the way that works for them and reality shifts to allow it. Brilliant.

5/7/22, 7:33 AM
@Essex Thank you so much for your continued support! Jack of Hearts of loads of fun to write for sure!
5/6/22, 6:21 PM
I'm excited for another round of this super fun story! πŸ˜€πŸ˜€

5/6/22, 11:32 PM
@NeedControlling Thanks! πŸ‘ŠπŸΌ
Muscle-Flex
5/6/22, 6:39 PM
Another excellent chapter. Don't worry about the length. Your chapters should be whatever length it takes to tell the story as you want to tell it. The combination of perspectives is fun! And now that the Doc has left a text telling Markus what he is going to do to him, we get to watch Markus struggle and try to resist! The ear buds.... Did the Doc put some kind of special earbud into Markus's ears the last time he had him in the medical exam room?

5/6/22, 7:16 PM
@Muscle-Flex I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter ^^ I always get a little worried when my chapters don't do too hot. However it's great to see that some people enjoy my story. And in terms of the earbuds, will, was it the first or last doctor visit. Who's to say πŸ‘€
5/6/22, 2:49 AM
This was so hot. And a great foundation for a future story. I can't wait to see what happens next One thing I'm wondering, what will the kinky punishment be? I can see it being an ironic punishment. Like it's based in whatever punishment you lost at. However, It could also be something completely different Like what if the loosers are sold off as slaves to pay for the winner? Maybe even the runner up. Like "here's your 50'000. Unfortunately, as your now this fine gentleman's slave, it will be going to him" Idk, just what I thought of as I read. Can't wait to see where this is going. And I hope some foot fetish, socks/shoe fetish is involved at some point. That's my favourite. Or maybe being trapped in latex would be a good fetish to involve. Who knows. Your the author so we'll have to wait and see what you decide

5/6/22, 4:50 PM
@Rubber_Lover Love your comment. Tysm and glad you enjoyed! Their will definetly be various types of kinks down the line!
5/6/22, 12:33 PM
I really like the story, Being owned and made to do whatever your owners want to do and dress how you are told is so hot. Hopefully he will get some nice piercings and maybe a tattoo
5/6/22, 12:26 PM
Great story