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Anonymous
10/8/22, 10:49 AM
Love it! Thanks for posting it.

10/10/22, 1:03 AM
@[Jock](/user/show/1004354) and i appreciate anyone bothering to read my work
Carus
10/9/22, 10:39 PM
Grammerly, even the free one, can often pick up misspellings that are spelled right but not the right word, so if you're looking then maybe give that a try otherwise I'm sure myself or somone else can help edit any stories.

10/9/22, 11:18 PM
@[Carus](/user/show/10001298) I tend to be too lazy to deal with those and just re read it myself. I might have to do more before I post the next story here.
10/9/22, 12:40 PM
how long the wait is, desperate...
10/9/22, 3:53 AM
This final is surprising... fair. Much less dark and dense than I thought. Maybe because the future stayed between the lines. I think many, like me, expected Scott and a future army of hypno-slaves from Luke Petrekka. But Luke, who sometimes acted like a sociopath, turned out to be more Lawful than Evil. I must say I liked the ending. The pace is amazing and the characters too. Congratulations.

10/9/22, 6:00 AM
@[Sexcrab](/user/show/10027159) Thank you. I did go back and forth a few times whether or not to have Luke use the spell on Scott but in the end I decided that Luke wasn't power mad just because he wanted to break and mold someone, he wanted that man to want it too. So, I am happy you enjoyed the ending.
10/8/22, 6:43 AM
Something tells me that this ending won't be exactly surprising, quite the opposite, but it won't stop being good nonetheless.

10/8/22, 2:52 PM
@[Sexcrab](/user/show/10027159) To me a good ending shouldn't be a surprise, it might not go exactly as you expect but it should make since given the characters which if I've done my job you should know well enough to know what they're mostly going to do. So it sounds like I'm doing my job right.
10/8/22, 2:41 PM
Excellent tale of transformation, i loved reading it while myself locked up in device
Martin
10/8/22, 8:47 AM
Dylan, why don't you user the site's editor official "insert image" button to insert an image? That way it'll be done properly!

Dylan
10/8/22, 9:10 AM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) I was not on here for almost one year, and now i am kinda blown away by all the changes. I will try to work it out 👍
bucke
10/8/22, 12:15 AM
Can't believe there is only one more part left. I'm greedy for more. I love it because while I can predict somewhat what will happen next, some other aspects I have no idea how you will end it so am very excited for the last part, but also sad that it'll be the end. I know you said after the end you didn't really see a way to continue, but do you plan on writing more here? I love your stuff and I feel like this more uniform/military aspect is not as common to see on this site.

10/8/22, 4:43 AM
@bucke I hope I leave you wanting more but also satisfied with the ending. And I do plan on writing more, I already have the first part of another story (also military themed) written and I might post it as I write it which will mean long periods between chapters but also that readers can help inspire what comes next in some ways. We'll have to see how that comes. But yes I enjoy both military and uniforms so they will be strong themes for me.
Zero
10/7/22, 2:43 PM
ooh interesting are we gonna see both brothers fall under the sway of the commander?

10/7/22, 10:23 PM
@Zero One more part to find out
10/7/22, 7:02 PM
I love the story 7 you're a very gifted writer. I will reserve my comments until I get to the most recent chapter.