Recent Comments

Hazard0707
1/23/23, 1:03 AM
Can't wait for the new 1
Jan 22, 2023
1/22/23, 8:12 PM
Hot! I agree that it would benefit from a bit of additional polish, but you'll get there! And I love the premise.
Jan 22, 2023
Anonymous
1/22/23, 6:10 PM
The story -- the substance is good. Really good, actually! The writing needs editing. Spell check and some grammar, but that's fixable. If you run MSWord, that takes all of two minutes. You'll appreciate it because it cures some of the syntax errors. Remember: you narrate not as you speak. That's why the editing is important. Keep going. It's a good start. I can't wait to read about the ortho-slaves in action.
Jan 22, 2023
1/22/23, 4:30 PM
The story is just FANTASTIC! I loved it. THANK YOU
SuperHero_Guy
1/22/23, 1:05 PM
You certainly must breed me I'm ready for you to lead me deeply into Temptation, no turning back to my old life. Go deep, go often, BREED ME 😈
Martin
1/22/23, 1:05 PM
This is a very hot story! I look forward to read more of it. I think it's more a Collar than a Spiral story, though.
Jan 22, 2023
1/22/23, 12:20 PM
separating by paragraphs would be fine, it is illegible

1/22/23, 12:28 PM
@[Maxigay](/user/show/524184) Sorry, it's my first story here and thought pressing enter would add a line break. Now I've edited it to have the proper paragraph separations, but it's still being reviewed :)
1/22/23, 12:13 PM
This ticks all my boxes with latex, drones and a superhero turning bad -hope we read more soon
1/21/23, 5:31 PM
This was great! I’d love more about these characters!!

1/22/23, 6:20 AM
@[Bound_Up_Boy](/user/show/907887) Thank you, there will be more stories with Adam and Ed, and some other characters too!
Connor
1/21/23, 4:02 PM
thanks for painting such a hot picture. very sexy - nice writing...!

1/22/23, 6:19 AM
@[Connor](/user/show/10032837) Thanks!