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Feb 17, 2023
2/18/23, 2:33 AM
not a single AI-generated or assisted story on this website has had any kind of genuine eroticism to it.
Feb 17, 2023
2/17/23, 11:57 PM
oh VERY nice story you need a couple more chapters
2/17/23, 11:12 PM
AHHH every new chapter I hope to read something that will make me like Marcus or at least tells me why he is such an asshole but all I get are more secrets and more questions :D Anyway great chapter as always. I am really looking forward to your chapters as they are a delight to read. I was quite sad back in the day when you stopped writing on here and there was no way of reaching you but I am just glad you are back.
Feb 17, 2023
LucasT
2/17/23, 8:42 PM
Hmm, I don't know what to think about this story. There seem to be some logical errors, like signing contract without hands? Or Tims Boss, who seems staggered with Tim not able to read, but obviously he had to be hired, did his work before without problem. As we know Tim and Fred seem to know each other quite a while. There are no information about background of Tim or Fred. And finally at the end Tim loses his mind. Debatable but after all of "all his thoughts and memories were being wiped away", there should be no option for him, the think about this situation as a "nightmare". All in all imho there is potential for improvement.
2/17/23, 6:50 AM
Really interesting how Damian's fate unfolds. And also, to ultimately have Stanley state it, that he somehow enjoys subbing for Marcus. And speaking of him, I'm glad he's more likeable in this chapter, than the previous one. You've build and interesting power dynamic between him and Stanley, and I'm very curious to see it develop with Rex in house. Possibly an alpha and a beta slave? If Rex was to join Stanley in chastity they could compete for a chance of unlocking, even if just to be denied either way. Anyhow, nice of Damian to stay to be a more prominent character from now on, he was a fun one when he first appeared.

2/17/23, 6:59 PM
@[Jet313](/user/show/10009595) Thanks for reading! Yeah I really like Damien and I kind of decided right away that he would become a main character. With Marcus people seem to feel kind of hot and cold about.
2/17/23, 6:19 PM
Loved this story!! I hope there is a continuation of Jake’s story!
Feb 17, 2023
Elm
2/17/23, 4:05 PM
There are a lot of things that I like about this story, specially the "read" command. It is a tad noticeable how it wasn't written by a person tough (it reiterates a lot, using the SAME words, instead of different ones for emphasis). Even while English isn't my first language I can tell something is off with the writing. Overall I liked it tough!

2/17/23, 4:23 PM
@[Elm](/user/show/567745) Thanks, Elm! That's really helpful feedback! You're absolutely right, the AI tends to like to use the same phrases verbatim, I have to kinda coax it to not do that with some creative prompting or else manually edit in those nuances. I'll pay closer attention to that when I edit next time! I ninja edited in some minor changes, hopefully it smooths things out a little!
2/17/23, 9:28 AM
Great continuation of series! The original was hot but it's getting hotter
2/17/23, 3:13 AM
i ❤️ Jack Parker
2/4/23, 6:42 AM
It was interesting and cute (one might say) at the same time. And the continuation of the story: "Pup Training for Police" will be?

2/17/23, 12:51 AM
@[Bright Dream🏳️‍🌈](/user/show/10028726) Soon.