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Feb 17, 2023
Anonymous
2/18/23, 8:36 PM
I just love this. Great story. Hope you continue it, please!
2/18/23, 12:13 PM
When will the next chapter being coming out?
Feb 17, 2023
2/18/23, 11:07 AM
I'm sorry, but AI generated stories should have no place here. There's no soul or eroticism to it. AI still runs based on biased coding. We're nowhere near it having a presence in creative communities where it won't create harm.
Feb 17, 2023
2/18/23, 3:17 AM
It will be interesting to see how AI writing develops, but it's just not there yet. ChatGPT in particular has been hobbled to prevent it from writing erotic scenarios and dialogue. I'm not sure it's any good at writing fiction at all yet, but it particularly is unable to capture the erotic charge necessary for this type of story. To the author, I would suggest you take what the AI has put out and try to re-write it in your own words, and flesh it out. Add some characterization and flourishes to breathe life into it. That would be more productive than having the AI continue to produce stories like this as a finished product. I understand how frustrating writer's block is. Try to let the AI help you push through it, but don't let it tell your story on its own. It's not up to the task.

2/18/23, 4:47 AM
@[amul](/user/show/10003734) I love this feedback
Feb 17, 2023
2/18/23, 2:33 AM
not a single AI-generated or assisted story on this website has had any kind of genuine eroticism to it.
Feb 17, 2023
2/17/23, 11:57 PM
oh VERY nice story you need a couple more chapters
2/17/23, 11:12 PM
AHHH every new chapter I hope to read something that will make me like Marcus or at least tells me why he is such an asshole but all I get are more secrets and more questions :D Anyway great chapter as always. I am really looking forward to your chapters as they are a delight to read. I was quite sad back in the day when you stopped writing on here and there was no way of reaching you but I am just glad you are back.
Feb 17, 2023
LucasT
2/17/23, 8:42 PM
Hmm, I don't know what to think about this story. There seem to be some logical errors, like signing contract without hands? Or Tims Boss, who seems staggered with Tim not able to read, but obviously he had to be hired, did his work before without problem. As we know Tim and Fred seem to know each other quite a while. There are no information about background of Tim or Fred. And finally at the end Tim loses his mind. Debatable but after all of "all his thoughts and memories were being wiped away", there should be no option for him, the think about this situation as a "nightmare". All in all imho there is potential for improvement.
2/17/23, 6:50 AM
Really interesting how Damian's fate unfolds. And also, to ultimately have Stanley state it, that he somehow enjoys subbing for Marcus. And speaking of him, I'm glad he's more likeable in this chapter, than the previous one. You've build and interesting power dynamic between him and Stanley, and I'm very curious to see it develop with Rex in house. Possibly an alpha and a beta slave? If Rex was to join Stanley in chastity they could compete for a chance of unlocking, even if just to be denied either way. Anyhow, nice of Damian to stay to be a more prominent character from now on, he was a fun one when he first appeared.

2/17/23, 6:59 PM
@[Jet313](/user/show/10009595) Thanks for reading! Yeah I really like Damien and I kind of decided right away that he would become a main character. With Marcus people seem to feel kind of hot and cold about.
2/17/23, 6:19 PM
Loved this story!! I hope there is a continuation of Jake’s story!