Please start using periods to break up your paragraphs into sentences. It would make the story so much smoother to read.

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Looking forward to more of this!

I know i complained about John's methods last chapter (mostly for fun), but I'm really hoping "Jack" (maybe with the help of Jackie) turns the tables on him.

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so this is where DS-011 got his start 🤔🤔🤔🤔

I concur with the people praising your talent @Neon Demon. This story may have the odd editorial lapse, but it's terrific writing. It's become my go to when I'm ready to shoot, and hasn't failed me yet. One of the things about really good writing is that it keeps the reader constantly intrigued and engaged. It gives you just the right amount of details, and lots of little mysteries that have you imagining all sorts of fascinating scenarios. There are hints all over the place, which may or may not get fleshed out into answers. And as we saw in this chapter, answers often create new mysteries to wonder about. Thanks for letting us see what happened to Jack and Dylan. That's one bit of resolution. But there's so much left to wonder about. What was Minotaur's fate and why did that "fucker" deserve it? Do all of Master's drones get to play with their cocks on Sundays? Why does DS-008/Horizon have a voice lock when DS-005/Dusk and DS-011/Pet do not? Which state is the norm for Master's superdrones and lesser drones? Is it a punishment or part of DS-008/Horizon's "breaking in"? What is Cerberus? Will that little dab of latex that snuck into Luxor cause his eventual submission to Master Myriad? And, of course, the central conundrum of whether Jamie will eventually find his bliss as Master's DS-013/Daybreak superdrone or remain unhappily Kid Rocket in the drudgery of his service to the League and some conventional notion of "heroism." Gee, I wonder which one I'd rather see? I don't know that we need the details of every superdrone's story, but DS-005/Dusk and DS-008/Horizon are such great subsidiary characters that it would be wonderful to read prequels with their stories. From the way Theo was talking, I wouldn't be surprised if he were a latex fetishist to begin with, and the voice lock is there because he fantasized about being a gimp. And assuming what Master said about the relationship between voluntary submission and power boosts was the truth, then clearly, Midnight wasn't the only one who came willingly into Master's service. And then there was Master's comment that willingness is a spectrum. Is it willingness at the time of submission that's the key, or does it have to be willingness while still completely or mostly free? Or maybe it's the length of struggle during the conversion process that's key - ie. the struggle could drain a super's powers, such that there's less and less to boost by the time they finally submit. Oh well, thank you for all these horny mysteries to ponder, and please keep up the great work.

Just a fun-tastic story. I hope there are so many adventures to follow!

An interesting premise. Hot idea and eager to see where it leads.

this is just FANTASTIC! And, your writing style is just wonderful. I love the storytelling. It is so good.