Recent Comments

Anonymous
3/4/23, 7:11 PM
Hot!! Please write the next chapter with the dad
Leathergaymer
3/4/23, 7:05 PM
Love leather boys, glad we have more stories focusing on leather, can’t wait for more.
3/4/23, 11:36 AM
Love the D&D stuff!

3/4/23, 6:39 PM
@[monstrod12345](/user/show/10003380) I’m so honored you enjoyed it! I actually have a whole series of D&D Quest Board stories, it’s just having the time to sit down and write. The more comments like this I get tho, the more motivated I feel to write!
3/4/23, 6:18 PM
WOW! I am so excited about the adventure of these two! THANK YOU for your excellent storytelling
Anonymous
3/4/23, 7:35 AM
hi its me one of the anononymuses (or anonymi? plural o_O) theres so much and like so many secrets and hidden notes and mysteries and small details in the expansive world building (like uhm the cigars and dylan's eyes and like literally all of midnight, hello? so cool ) anyone interested in making a fan discord or something to discuss about the story and stuffs?

3/4/23, 5:22 PM
@Anonymous I might, if I could figure out how that works. There's a pretty low limit to my tech and social media savvy.
Anonymous
3/2/23, 9:51 PM
i love this! aside from if you have a patreon i can literally immediately contribute to o_O, what's up with how the latex/symbiote works? Why does it cover teeth, and how does it connect all the drones? (if this will be revealed later in an epic sequel then don't answer + pls keep up the suspense! the plot is sooo hot)

3/3/23, 3:32 AM
@Anonymous I thought the connection question was mostly answered with Jamie's insight that all of the drones are really part of Master, who sits at the center of their collective hive mind.

Anonymous
3/3/23, 1:12 PM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) What will the symbiotic feel/say now that Jamie is away from Master? Is he still connected to Master even far away?

3/4/23, 12:12 AM
@Anonymous i think that Master Myriad would like maybe influence Jamie subconsciously (via the Symbiote) to be more accepting

3/4/23, 6:38 AM
@Anonymous I don't think distance really matters with these connections, or at least not the distance you find in a city and its surroundings. From the hints we've gotten, it seems like all the drones feel their connection to Master and his hive mind at all times, but that this is intensified when his attention is on the individual drone specifically. As for what the symbiote will do while Jamie is away from Master's presence, my guess is that at particularly vulnerable moments, the symbiote will be whispering more sweet nothings,enticements, and blandishments in Jamie's mind, singing Master's praises and seeking to sway Jamie. Eventually, at some climactic moment of anguish and anger and disillusionment at the League, Jamie will ask DS-013 to summon Horizon. He will gratefully submit to Master and become his DS-013/Daybreaker. Then he will live in the bliss of service to Master, and gleefully help Master subdue Jamie's former colleagues so that they fulfill Master's dream of having every superhero kneeling before him as his latex-covered superdrones. But hopefully, it will take a while to get there. And really, only our talented author knows for sure what will happen, but we'll enjoy every word it takes to get us to whatever destination he has in mind.

3/4/23, 6:46 AM
@[temporaryhotsaucetofu](/user/show/10034005) I think DS-013 will be more overt in his commentary in Jamie's head. See my reply to Anonymous.

Anonymous
3/4/23, 7:27 AM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) While I do love a happy ending, I hope this story has more twists left than that.

Anonymous
3/4/23, 7:31 AM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) ah ok! to be honest i am also very interested in like Dusk since the scene between Jamie (and also neon demon said something about daybreaker and sunrise, so maybe Dawn contrasted with Dusk?) was so hot, idk maybe Dusk and DS013 becomes boyfriends?

3/4/23, 4:56 PM
@Anonymous Triad - Daybreaker, Dusk, Horizon. And only when Master lets them play, of course.

3/4/23, 5:07 PM
@Anonymous Of course it does. My scenario is a very broad outline of what could happen here. But to quote Ira Gershwin, "it take a lo-o-ong pull to get there." Even if I'm right, there's plenty of room in that outline for lots of twists and turns. And @NeonDemon has a considerably better imagination than I do.
3/4/23, 2:59 PM
I really liked it. Thank you very much. Very well written, You allow us to feel every sensation the boy had. And obviously i wish were that boy ...
3/4/23, 2:54 PM
The introduction of ‘the Jack’ persona is so hot! Hope he’s a full cocky, smirking bad boy.
3/4/23, 1:37 PM
You need to run spell check.
2/28/23, 11:59 AM
Please start using periods to break up your paragraphs into sentences. It would make the story so much smoother to read.

2/28/23, 3:11 PM
@[Nodara](/user/show/970256) Mmm i see plese if possible can give me an example of what you exactly mean? then maybe i can do better in future story someday also sorry i do it the most fast i can but at same time try to keep the best quality i can at same time

Martin
2/28/23, 5:18 PM
@[Bazir](/user/show/911833) For some reasons, all full stops are missing from your story. I just realized this now. It seems they got lost when you imported the text? It really makes it hard to read.

Martin
2/28/23, 5:19 PM
@[Bazir](/user/show/911833) I have to correct myself. They are there, but you love long... I mean loooong sentences :sweat_smile:

2/28/23, 7:57 PM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) i re read the story and the only thing i find near all you said was maybe when i imput action or reaction with the stylyzed letter in the mid of sentences? i do that for rps and have work until now maybe you think its better separate them all? i think was fine like that but if it really hard maybe we can ask if that can be edited or left the same way? also that happened as i have said because the rush too good thing the time was expanded so more people can participate :)

Martin
3/1/23, 1:50 PM
@[Bazir](/user/show/911833) I think it's a bit hard to read for people who are not used to that style. You still have a couple of days, so why don't you edit your story? I think it's worth it! I have to admit I had a hard time with it myself, and I'd prefer if it were written in a more novel-like format.

3/1/23, 6:21 PM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) ok then i try find some time for that i also later would apresiate hints to fix the thigs that make it hard to read and then thanks for the advice i wish the people enjoy this work hehe

Martin
3/1/23, 9:08 PM
@[Bazir](/user/show/911833) First of all: Use quotation marks to denote direct speech. And shorten the sentences. Add . and , to the text where appropriate. That helps immensely.

3/4/23, 5:41 AM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) ok i try one day to put on that i thin for quatation marks you mena "Hello my name its Bazir" right? sorry for late reply really busy days also thanks for the hits :)

Martin
3/4/23, 8:29 AM
@[Bazir](/user/show/911833) Yes, exactly like that. I think your story deserves to get that treatment!