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Anonymous
3/10/23, 9:45 PM
Das ist so geil .. dachte ich bin der Sklave. Gibt es eine Fortsetzung?
3/10/23, 3:29 PM
What struck me most on this read was just what a shithead Atlas is turning out to be. He's come a long way from the "good man doing good" that Jamie first met, or thought he met. He's so cold, callous, and ruthless in what he wants to do with Jamie. Though his assessment of Jamie chasing after pleasure may not be too far off. And then there's Ambrosius, so eager to control the heroes the same way Master controls his drones. It really paints a picture of a supposedly "good" organization that at its heart is pretty much as corrupt and evil as any supervillain.

3/10/23, 3:47 PM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) and what I love about what Neon Demon did is frame this in the context of, well, it's hard to explain but Master's old question of "what is better, the act of doing good or the intent of doing good" really rings true. What will Jamie pick? it's so deliciously written and planned out :flushed: :333
3/10/23, 2:55 PM
Holy hell, you may have outdone yourself here. The way you described the ink and metal and silicone flowing from one to the other, corrupting not only the body but the mind and even the soul. This is mastery. You should be incredibly proud of yourself here.
3/10/23, 2:27 PM
Great addition, and teasing of so much more to come! 😍
3/10/23, 1:37 PM
Can't wait to read more
Anonymous
3/10/23, 9:53 AM
I'm...honestly surprised we got a Master Myriad POV. I mean, on the one hand, he's an absolutely *enthralling* character and I've been dying to get into his head since a couple of chapters ago. On the other hand, I feel like it's almost an unwritten rule of drone fiction that Master is unimpeachable, unattainable, incomprehensible -- more than a mere man; a living god. I think you've done a beautiful job of giving him just a few humanizing qualities without losing that deliciously dark edge that makes everyone tremble with, uh...let's say fear. And speaking of fear, I find it interesting that the League's very fear that Myriad is some kind of totally inhuman monster not only serves as justification for their own misdeeds, but also distracts them from what really makes him dangerous -- namely, his subtler schemes such as his infiltration of city hall. An infiltration helped, no doubt, by Myriad's abilities, but one that could conceivably have been carried out by anyone with enough patience, cunning, and natural charisma. It all dovetails so wonderfully with other themes and questions posed by the story thus far. But, I'm sure some of that is just a happy coincidence, right? Nobody could write such fiendishly clever erotica that makes you contemplate the nature of good and evil while you wank! You'd have to be some kind of diabolical mastermind...
3/10/23, 9:16 AM
Amazing job! Well written and a great story. Even stuff I’m not into I enjoyed reading. good show.
3/10/23, 8:07 AM
Just incredible. Such an imaginative story! So well written! Perfectly paced! So hot! Great characters! I especially loved Arjay. He’s very different from other characters I’ve read about here. That really turned me on! I’d love to read more about his adventures before and after this story. Every chapter was a winner and got me rock hard. I came four times while reading this story. (I read a chapter or two a night.) And it all adds up to something very well crafted, sexy and fun! You are a very talented writer.
3/10/23, 5:51 AM
I am SO GLAD to see that Jamie's rent situation has been handled. there were literally no other pressing issues other than that, and now it's handled, so I'm sure things will be fine from here on out! jokes aside, this was a great chapter! I think doing asmaler interlude bits here was a great choice for the pacing
3/10/23, 5:46 AM
I hope you are going to continue this story because it’s very hot!!!