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3/10/23, 5:46 AM
I hope you are going to continue this story because it’s very hot!!!
3/10/23, 2:47 AM
Another great chapter, Neon Demon. It's not quite as horny as the Prologue or Chapter 3, but it has its moments. The balance of exposition to continued mystery is exquisite. Plots and counterplots! Oh my! I love the way you confirmed the "heroes'" villainy, out of their own mouths. And told us what Cerberus probably was, without quite telling us for sure. That gets me really rooting for Master. You also confirmed my suspicion that the phone chip was a setup for politicians Master wanted to take down. Dylan's conversion scene was superb, and wonderfully ambiguous. If left completely to his own will, would he still have accepted the offer? And I'm loving the hints that DS-005/Dusk is carrying a bit of a torch for his Boom Boy. Now that I've read though it, I'm going to read it again, and really savor it. Because another thing about really good writing is that it rewards your rereading it with details and insights you missed on the first read.

3/10/23, 3:12 AM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) hey if you get in touch with Neon Demon, we've actually been talking stuff so if you want to set up that discord, well, lets just say that the lore is FAR more fleshed out than what the stories seem someone's been working HARD in worldbuilding

3/10/23, 4:07 AM
@[temporaryhotsaucetofu](/user/show/10034005) OK. How do I do that?

3/10/23, 4:10 AM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) im not sure if im allowed to link stuff directly on GSS, but if you click on his profile, it should pop up his twitter. his twitter bio has a link and has his Discord contacts, highly reccomend talking to him he said that he really liked us 2 theorizing o_O and yeahs!

3/10/23, 5:32 AM
@[temporaryhotsaucetofu](/user/show/10034005) Cool. I'll give in a shot. I'd love chatting directly with our super creative author.
3/10/23, 3:21 AM
for one, the Superpower/magic system is incredibly and intricately thorough and thought out. there's like drawbacks for abusing or even using power, something that I don't see often being discussed, and that could be really interesting down the line. the checks and balances used makes the Superpowers incredibly "realistic" in a way that animates it and makes it so ground in reality
3/10/23, 1:10 AM
FIRST ALSO HELLO FELLOW INSOMNIACS :wink:
3/10/23, 1:00 AM
Excellent story, always love hair growth, especially facial hair. The pic was perfect and made him even hotter. Definitely needs to be continued. I would also suggest trying more length and a more detailed transformation.
3/9/23, 11:11 PM
You've written a lot of great stories over the years, but this is one of my favorites!
Elm
3/9/23, 5:32 PM
Really good! (As always), still there are a few typos (Names mostly, you confuse Ray with Harry in some sentences). Overall I liked it! Always nice to get a story from you!
3/9/23, 5:24 PM
I find myself wondering what are John's plans exactly when his nephew doesn't go home, or even when John's brother comes for his son? Cause the way things are going it's possibly already starting to get out of his control. Welp, karma and all that :laughing:
3/7/23, 10:55 PM
I gotta say, I'm really obsessed with this story. As the days pass, I check my phone more and more frequently for the next chapter to drop. One thing interesting in this chapter is the switch in POV to Luxor at the end. I wonder if we'll get more different POVs as the story progresses. So far, we've had the King of Beasts/Pet/DS-011 in the Prologue, Jamie throughout the rest, and now this bit of Luxor. What I'd really like to see is the inner workings of the mind of a fully converted superdrone, especially one of the former heroes - Dusk, Horizon, or even Goliath.

3/8/23, 6:00 AM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) something that i've wondered is the amount of "smartness" (for the lack of better term) every drone has. like for example in the prologue, Pet kinda seemed as if his thoughts were incredibly simple/dilated, similar to the first occurence in chapter 4 of Jamie; contrast that to Dusk who seemed to be incredibly persuasive and quickthinking while still loving Master a lot also yeah idk what about this series but its ADDICTING

3/8/23, 1:45 PM
@[temporaryhotsaucetofu](/user/show/10034005) See below

3/8/23, 4:48 PM
@[temporaryhotsaucetofu](/user/show/10034005) Now my answer to your question is appearing above. Anyway, if you look, you'll hopefully find it.

3/9/23, 11:45 AM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) ah found it, thanks! i think that you are right in the presumptions. im curious to know how the mental merging of the consciousness would work, that's something that always i think can be so heartfelt where 2 different individuals, despite their differences, can be united and merged into one being, one entity, one soul theres so much more deeper lore (like how did the teeth and insides become latexed acc to jamie? and is Dusk the only one where Master is seen to "possess" the body? etc. etc.) but yeah this is fun to figure out all these lore tidbits in this super hot and sexy series
3/9/23, 7:43 AM
Excellent twist to the storyline. Can't wait for the next part.