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3/10/23, 1:37 PM
Can't wait to read more
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3/10/23, 9:53 AM
I'm...honestly surprised we got a Master Myriad POV. I mean, on the one hand, he's an absolutely *enthralling* character and I've been dying to get into his head since a couple of chapters ago. On the other hand, I feel like it's almost an unwritten rule of drone fiction that Master is unimpeachable, unattainable, incomprehensible -- more than a mere man; a living god. I think you've done a beautiful job of giving him just a few humanizing qualities without losing that deliciously dark edge that makes everyone tremble with, uh...let's say fear. And speaking of fear, I find it interesting that the League's very fear that Myriad is some kind of totally inhuman monster not only serves as justification for their own misdeeds, but also distracts them from what really makes him dangerous -- namely, his subtler schemes such as his infiltration of city hall. An infiltration helped, no doubt, by Myriad's abilities, but one that could conceivably have been carried out by anyone with enough patience, cunning, and natural charisma. It all dovetails so wonderfully with other themes and questions posed by the story thus far. But, I'm sure some of that is just a happy coincidence, right? Nobody could write such fiendishly clever erotica that makes you contemplate the nature of good and evil while you wank! You'd have to be some kind of diabolical mastermind...
3/10/23, 9:16 AM
Amazing job! Well written and a great story. Even stuff I’m not into I enjoyed reading. good show.
3/10/23, 8:07 AM
Just incredible. Such an imaginative story! So well written! Perfectly paced! So hot! Great characters! I especially loved Arjay. He’s very different from other characters I’ve read about here. That really turned me on! I’d love to read more about his adventures before and after this story. Every chapter was a winner and got me rock hard. I came four times while reading this story. (I read a chapter or two a night.) And it all adds up to something very well crafted, sexy and fun! You are a very talented writer.
3/10/23, 5:51 AM
I am SO GLAD to see that Jamie's rent situation has been handled. there were literally no other pressing issues other than that, and now it's handled, so I'm sure things will be fine from here on out! jokes aside, this was a great chapter! I think doing asmaler interlude bits here was a great choice for the pacing
3/10/23, 5:46 AM
I hope you are going to continue this story because it’s very hot!!!
3/10/23, 2:47 AM
Another great chapter, Neon Demon. It's not quite as horny as the Prologue or Chapter 3, but it has its moments. The balance of exposition to continued mystery is exquisite. Plots and counterplots! Oh my! I love the way you confirmed the "heroes'" villainy, out of their own mouths. And told us what Cerberus probably was, without quite telling us for sure. That gets me really rooting for Master. You also confirmed my suspicion that the phone chip was a setup for politicians Master wanted to take down. Dylan's conversion scene was superb, and wonderfully ambiguous. If left completely to his own will, would he still have accepted the offer? And I'm loving the hints that DS-005/Dusk is carrying a bit of a torch for his Boom Boy. Now that I've read though it, I'm going to read it again, and really savor it. Because another thing about really good writing is that it rewards your rereading it with details and insights you missed on the first read.

3/10/23, 3:12 AM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) hey if you get in touch with Neon Demon, we've actually been talking stuff so if you want to set up that discord, well, lets just say that the lore is FAR more fleshed out than what the stories seem someone's been working HARD in worldbuilding

3/10/23, 4:07 AM
@[temporaryhotsaucetofu](/user/show/10034005) OK. How do I do that?

3/10/23, 4:10 AM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) im not sure if im allowed to link stuff directly on GSS, but if you click on his profile, it should pop up his twitter. his twitter bio has a link and has his Discord contacts, highly reccomend talking to him he said that he really liked us 2 theorizing o_O and yeahs!

3/10/23, 5:32 AM
@[temporaryhotsaucetofu](/user/show/10034005) Cool. I'll give in a shot. I'd love chatting directly with our super creative author.
3/10/23, 3:21 AM
for one, the Superpower/magic system is incredibly and intricately thorough and thought out. there's like drawbacks for abusing or even using power, something that I don't see often being discussed, and that could be really interesting down the line. the checks and balances used makes the Superpowers incredibly "realistic" in a way that animates it and makes it so ground in reality
3/10/23, 1:10 AM
FIRST ALSO HELLO FELLOW INSOMNIACS :wink:
3/10/23, 1:00 AM
Excellent story, always love hair growth, especially facial hair. The pic was perfect and made him even hotter. Definitely needs to be continued. I would also suggest trying more length and a more detailed transformation.