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6/15/23, 8:10 PM
Please don’t tell me this is the end 😭😭😭. Good chapter as always, your writing is perfect.

6/15/23, 8:11 PM
@[Angel πŸ˜‡](/user/show/10027188) Nope just the first story arc

6/16/23, 12:15 AM
@[Jack Parker](/user/show/10016753) thank the Good Lord.
6/15/23, 10:47 PM
Definitely seeing the start to some ulterior motives from the dad. Liking it.
6/15/23, 9:49 PM
Interesting turn of events. I’m excited to see what comes next.
6/15/23, 8:44 PM
I absolutely adore the slow-burn nature of this. The imagery is amazing, and the little hints of what is to come are so titillating. Just fantastic.
6/15/23, 8:42 PM
I was eagerly waiting for the next chapter this week and it didn’t come! Glad I read through the comments. Good luck on exams!
Elm
6/15/23, 8:27 PM
Overall I liked it, but it needs a few revisions (I gather you used some kind of AI to help you with your writing. I can tell from the over use of "I couldn't help", or the way it stiffly describes some scenes). It's fine to use AI (in my opinion, as it can help with structure or phrasing), but you have to add your own soul to it, the machine won't do it for you. But what do I know haha
6/15/23, 3:55 PM
the kind of stories which I've been longing to read 😭
6/14/23, 3:37 PM
I am really liking Onyx as a character. He's only made two short appearances so far, but he's been impressive. Aside from being my physical ideal for a man, his personality is so larger than life, even becoming a drone couldn't really tame him. His combination of brat, frat bro, and deadly hunter is really intriguing. My guess is that he uses the former to disguise the latter, and that this is what makes him so good at what he does. I'm really looking forward to seeing his character development and how he goes about making his mission a success.

6/14/23, 11:59 PM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) I wonder what does Onyx think of Master's superdrones. Is he jealous? is he friends with all of them? does he play with some of them on sunday? many thoughts, and little answers. . .

6/15/23, 2:03 AM
@[temporaryhotsaucetofu](/user/show/10034005) I don't think there's much jealousy among Master's drones. That would be counterproductive to their common goals, and them all being part of the Network facilitates a degree of understanding. They all take pride in their roles. Though there may be some competition among them. And they're not completely conflict free, as the near argument between 05 and 011 in Chapter 4 suggests. As for Onyx's relations with the superdrones, I'd guess he's happy to work with them when needed, and he certainly loves helping Master acquire new ones. So first they are his prey, and once converted, they are useful colleagues and brother drones.

Anonymous
6/15/23, 12:28 PM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) Does Master allow cross-drone-types to play with each other? It could be fun if hound drones and pupper drones could frolic around

6/15/23, 1:16 PM
@Anonymous I think he does occasionally, though bear in mind the hounds are in human form (and not even visibly larexed) most of the time. And they are busy, with a lot of work to do. Assuming that the beasts mentioned early in the dream were DHs in a K9ish form, I suppose they could be allowed to play with pups in that form.
6/15/23, 6:13 AM
You threw me with the term: BEANIE. I've always thought that BEANIE was a kid's cap or a woman's hat. But I see that in some parts of the world, BEANIE is the word that we in the States might call a SKULL CAP or a WATCH CAP.
6/13/23, 1:53 AM
Yes! Yes! Fucking Yes! I've been waiting for this! And this was just as good as the previous chapters. And I really like where the next chapter is heading. I will try and reframe from theories or suggestions. Your work in this series has been some of the best it has read of this rubber superhero genre. I really look forward to your next chapter.

6/13/23, 6:27 PM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) Thanks so much for the comment! Go ahead with the theories! I love them, and they help me organise my ideas a bit better. If you have any specific comments or critiques, comment them, or message me on discord.

6/15/23, 12:27 AM
@[Neon Demon](/user/show/10023852) Well thank you for the invite. I will start with one criticism for this chapter. Just after Luxor tries to go to the gym there feels like some time dilation occurs. How soon had he stepped out to when Jamie had to be stuck in the latex for 15 minutes? It doesn't feel like it adds up. As to theories and questions it has about the upcoming chapter. The sudden and timely coincidence of Jamie offering to go to the gym with Luxor just after his forced conditioning does imply that the symbiote got him to do that. Which is backed by the fact the gym is a place Myriad controls. And that Alex is there. Another thought/theory is how much Alex will work them both? Or will he largely focus on Luxor? Also I have been curious about the musk/scent kink growing in Luxor. Its clearly from the symbiote he doesn't know he has on him, but to what end? Does Myriad plan on having him as a type of hound? Or is this a more repressed kink that is being brought to light? But on the other hand, how can Alex be equipped to begin influencing Luxor to begin with? What exploits does he know? What information did he get from DT-X? This could be a great chance for the shapeshifter to come into play. Have him be a second Alex or even a Midnight (human version) would have its benefits. But they have a month of house arrest. So things can't go too fast. So the question is how covertly can Myriad operate in getting both heroes to convert?