Recent Comments

6/14/23, 11:06 PM
This was completely remarkable. Literary in tone and a fantastic amount of world-building. And I definitely saw the Altered Carbon nods.

6/16/23, 11:52 AM
@[DaymionMC](/user/show/10033419) Thank you so much, that's hugely encouraging to us both! Actually, we have some plans to eventually do some rewriting of about the first 8 chapters to smooth a few things and maybe add a bit more here and there. Probably after the next chapter we publish!
6/16/23, 6:09 AM
Dang, Jack. You know how much I love this story. The pictures really add a whole new level to the story. I'm digging how the whole story arc ties into what we know about Sammy and about Eden. Don't stop.
rwriter51
6/16/23, 1:41 AM
You always have such interesting twists and turns in the plot. That's what keeps me coming back for more, that and Sammy Parker's little dick. :laughing:

6/16/23, 1:51 AM
@[rwriter51](/user/show/10008532) yeah it's tragic what he has to work with :)
AgentCoyner
6/16/23, 1:39 AM
I've never been into rubber very much but this is _super fucking hot_. I can't wait to read the next part!!
6/15/23, 8:10 PM
Please don’t tell me this is the end 😭😭😭. Good chapter as always, your writing is perfect.

6/15/23, 8:11 PM
@[Angel πŸ˜‡](/user/show/10027188) Nope just the first story arc

6/16/23, 12:15 AM
@[Jack Parker](/user/show/10016753) thank the Good Lord.
6/15/23, 10:47 PM
Definitely seeing the start to some ulterior motives from the dad. Liking it.
6/15/23, 9:49 PM
Interesting turn of events. I’m excited to see what comes next.
6/15/23, 8:44 PM
I absolutely adore the slow-burn nature of this. The imagery is amazing, and the little hints of what is to come are so titillating. Just fantastic.
6/15/23, 8:42 PM
I was eagerly waiting for the next chapter this week and it didn’t come! Glad I read through the comments. Good luck on exams!
Elm
6/15/23, 8:27 PM
Overall I liked it, but it needs a few revisions (I gather you used some kind of AI to help you with your writing. I can tell from the over use of "I couldn't help", or the way it stiffly describes some scenes). It's fine to use AI (in my opinion, as it can help with structure or phrasing), but you have to add your own soul to it, the machine won't do it for you. But what do I know haha