I definitely want to hear more about what happens to Patrick. You've created a very compelling future world here.

That was evil! I was so close to coming, and then no joi! very well written, and I love the concept!

Such a hot concept. I hope you keep going.

Great chapter, Cody finally dominated and ready to be used as a sexy cowboy boytoy he truly is. Two things intrigue me for the next chapters, though: First is Justin's position. Barely started and already tinkering with the mind control work that Dexter created. Even if it is not overlapping, yet, any orders or commands that the friend implemented in Chad, this is already worrying and potential conflicts could arise from this. After all, we don't know of any potential interests Justin has. Initially it may just be to humiliate Chad, but this could just be the beginning of an even bigger plot. Then there's the issue of Rich/potential slaves. It's more of a concern than a criticism. In the vast majority, if not all harem stories, the tendency is to have more quantity than memory of the protagonist's slaves. And right now, I think Rich illustrates that more than anything else: How relevant is he going to be when he's taken over by Dexter? We'll get to know who is the person behind the rich, handsome, intelligent and hard-working athlete, to the point of wanting to be the first in everything and who, because he was surpassed by his dumbest friend, ended up under the control of a nerd with a "god complex"? I mean, Rich isn't hot like Cody or intimidating like Chad or idle like Brad (and for that, he was transformed into a butler/bodyguard). If only Rich's father was a super hot millionaire daddy, then things would change a bit, because the young man would certainly serve as a bridge to make Dexter have the richest man in town under his power. And it would open doors for other daddies to get on our psycho poindexter's radar, like the aforementioned Papa Bauer (so many comments asking for it!). The fact that Rich is smarter than his other friends could also be useful for potential counseling. Despite my personal wishes, I also think this story makes more sense of having more young slaves than middle-aged ones. I love daddies, but these don't seem like Dexter's jam, at least from what we've seen so far. Not to mention that there are many types of young people in the world. The name of the series is "Master of the Jocks" after all. There must be other types of hot young athletes ready to be aligned to the protagonist's sexual needs.

I'm not really seeing the straight to gay tag being applicable here. Missing the revenge tag though.

Great concept! I really enjoyed it! Few typos/grammatical errors but that doesn’t really matter too much. Interested to see where it goes! Keep it up!

Damn. This was hot. Can't wait for a further part, maybe even having Thor be Deans bitch outside the spell

It ends with "To be continued" ... I hope this is still the author's intention!

Loved this story, but one thing I’d suggest is giving a more detailed account of why Tom is “deserving” yes he’s a misogynist, but it is addressed near the end that he is a rapist. Since this series seems to be about truly terrible victims, you need to tell us at the start and make us believe they are terrible. Also personal input would be to add his transformation into the glory hole, but that’s preference.

A very cool idea, which I can easily see expanded in a form of a series. Well, the whole theme of "deserving victims" is very much up my alley, as then they can get punished to no limits. I must admit, I was a little lost about Tom's dick situation, initially I thought that the dick would also be available to play with, constantly bringing Tom closer to the edge, which would always evade him (as in, his dick could get turned into a dildo for public use, that's just what I imagined would be happening). I like your style, and am looking forward to future writings from you.