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12/5/25, 1:58 AM
Rereading the ending here, I'm thinking that maybe the World going white is Jamie's power erupting to smack down Dauntless...We can hope, I guess.
12/4/25, 1:07 AM
I am thoroughly enjoying this series. Very inventive. My only concern is that the over-powering nature of 'The Fire' might detract from the story as a whole. As an aside, I have only very recently dipped my toe in the 'AI Pond'. Until I read Corin's comment, I had no idea AI was involved. So what supposedly indicates 'AI Prose'? And what is 'Contains AI patterns' and how does it different from 'AI Assisted'? Also, are you using ChatGPT, your own GPT, or is there another one out there that is more suited to erotica? Thanks. Oh, and keep up the good work!

12/4/25, 11:34 AM
@[Aaelefein](/user/show/914471) Thank you for your kind words. It's very inspiring and motivating! In my understanding, "AI prose" means repeating plot points with different words, overexaggerating words that are out of context, inconsistent details, and anything that interferes with normal storytelling. The version of AI that I used in this story heavily used em dashes. There are hundreds of em dashes in the original output. If you read more closely, you may find unnatural colons, overly long insertion sentences, and piled-up adjectives. I edited most em dashes out and split sentences, but it seems that wasn't enough. So I am re-editing the remaining two chapters, making them more natural to read. The main frame of this story was inspired by a chat I had with ChatGPT. We discussed the overall lore and main plot, like what this _fire_ can or can't do and the personal traits of each character. Then I wrote a more detailed plot as a prompt and fed it into Grok. Grok is very open to erotic themes, as long as all participants are voluntary and no minors are included. After getting those raw outputs, I edited out the unnatural parts - tons of em dashes, for example - to make it more like erotica rather than dream talk. (The original outputs more like the last sentence.)

12/4/25, 10:32 PM
@[DestinSalvatore](/user/show/1962140) Good, good - Thanks! Haven't come across the problem of to many em-dashes, but then I use them and ellipsis quite often even before I came across GPT. Don't plan on letting GPT write my stories though - I'll write a chapter first, then let it do clean up, check for inconsistencies and contradictions, and suggest content that I wouldn't come up with on my own... I'm very poor with emotional and humor stuff. Great with the technical/scientific stuff though. Grok seems to have the same limitations as ChatGPT - no biggie there. Thanks much.
12/4/25, 2:50 PM
Goddamn that was hot 🥵🥵🥵

12/4/25, 9:02 PM
@[JimsJorts](/user/show/10008527) Thanks for the compliment. There is more to come.
12/4/25, 4:51 PM
Really glad you like the longer format and the character development. I pondered for a long time before putting stories on the site. I crossed my fingers that there would be other readers like me who appreciate a more detailed back story. My hope was that the “suspension of disbelief” could hug the line between what is possible and what is probable 🤭 I love the newbie genre but as an older guy who has become no less submissive over time, I wondered if there might be an audience for more mature characters who had lives outside of their sex lives. Sexy and beautiful relationships cover a huge diversity in reality and I have always liked to see that reflected in fiction. Glad you enjoyed it and thank you for taking time to comment.
12/4/25, 12:09 AM
Okay - there were a couple of tears again. Master Wayne and Johnnie - SUCH refreshing characters for erotic fiction. They’re almost non-existent in this genre and I commend you!! I’m conditioned to envision a submissive character as being a newbie in his 20s. When you remind us that Johnnie is older, my heart skips a beat and draws me in even more. And I absolutely love that you tied in The Pound! Was a joy to see the stories overlap. What I andmire about your stories is that…yes, technically they’re erotic fiction. But I almost forget that because it actually feels like a glimpse into their lives and not just something you conjured to induce a boner. You let the reader really get to know these characters. They have depth. They have arcs. They evolve and grow. Also, I’m assuming that you know a bit about neuroscience and the subconscious mind? When you write about some of the science behind the hypnosis and programming, you take us right to the edge of the suspension of disbelief without throwing us off the cliff. Maybe you’re pulling jargon out of your arse and making it all up, but it sure reads as though Master Wayne’s research has some legitimacy to it and he’s ahead of our time. I appreciate that your stories aren’t about brainwashing or turning your main characters into something they’re not, ie converting them from straight to gay. They have that submissive part buried within. What they are put through is actually healing and allows them to live authentically. Can’t say enough good things!!
10/12/25, 2:34 AM
Holy eff. I am so glad I stumbled upon this 😳🫣🥵

12/3/25, 5:28 PM
@[Steve-18](/user/show/10037951) i hope ure following the story! lmao
12/3/25, 4:52 PM
What a great story! Who is Will and how did he come by his powers? This is just fabulous and makes a slut like me very envious of all the characters. Still working out which one I’d rather be. I hope you never stop writing and sharing your wonderfully dirty and talented imagination with us all.
12/3/25, 3:47 PM
Hot hot HOT!
12/3/25, 3:11 PM
Thank you for supporting my first series. I have decided to take a break before releasing chapter three to explore other stories. If you want to see a chapter three please feel free to let me know. All feedback is welcome.
12/3/25, 12:44 PM
A very intriguing story, indeed! The idea is great and hot. The excessive AI prose distracts a bit, I think you could improve your text a lot by cutting and editing a bit yourself. But your idea is definitely worth to continue to read this series!

12/3/25, 2:45 PM
@[Corin](/user/show/125990) Thank you for your confirmation! I'll try to do better in future chapters.