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Nov 22, 2024
gdlosh13@gmail.com
11/24/24, 1:14 PM
Will there more like it cumming our way?

11/25/24, 3:44 PM
@gdlosh13@gmail.com Sorry, this story was a "one off". I have no ideas on how to further the narrative. Everything I wanted to tell happened to Sam. Probably the only thing left, and I think the reader would make this assumption is: as an influencer, Sam would've encouraged more men to visit this gym, and the process would repeat itself as each curious man entered its doors.
Nov 22, 2024
11/24/24, 6:02 AM
I also feel that some milky white shower gels/liquid soaps look like cum, especially those that claim "added musk". Of course, that refers to synthetic musk similar to the smell of deer musk, but sometimes I wonder what if it is "human musk"? Reading this story was so satisfying that I couldn't help but want to take a shower, lubricate and jerk off with musk soap.

11/25/24, 3:38 PM
@[Tofu83](/user/show/87624) If you felt compelled to shower, lubricate and jerk off ... then your programming is perfectly installed and you are functioning as expected.
11/25/24, 7:16 AM
I like the basic idea for the plot, but for me there was not enough seduction. I like to feel the power shift from Dom to sub. This moved a little too fast for me, and at the end of this chapter I was still left with too many questions and no second chapter!

11/25/24, 12:42 PM
@[boi98229](/user/show/10027285) Thankyou for the feedback, I agree that I did move too quickly with little seduction, I wrote this yesterday, a second chapter is on its way, I'm hoping to create a series that shows the shift of will through each installment, and don't worry there will be much more seduction.
Nov 25, 2024
11/25/24, 4:58 AM
always love when you post, im still eagerly awaiting the surrendr remake and am so stoked to see a new story

11/25/24, 9:38 AM
@[StarryEyes](/user/show/535632) Thanks for reading! Still working on Surrendr 2.0!
11/25/24, 7:17 AM
Amazing chapter can't wait for more of this and your other stories.
11/25/24, 6:48 AM
😮
11/24/24, 9:07 PM
I'm shocked that there aren't any comments yet! This story is really good and I'm looking forward to what's to come. Now I have to go back and look at your other series.

11/24/24, 9:23 PM
@[HimboPup](/user/show/10011980) Thank you that's very kind. They'll slot together so you will see plenty of cross over characters. As to why there are not many comments, pass. But I only started writing them last month for the Halloween challenge maybe it takes awhile for readers to commit to reading longer more character driven stories and new writers to learn what the audience wants. Plus this one only went uo a few days ago :blush:
Nov 22, 2024
11/24/24, 8:42 AM
Just joining in the chorus saying this was AMAZING. As @Hypnothrill said, you do an amazing job with the dreamlike quality of the story--the fact that Sam doesn't recognize Marshall's clothing until after they've spoken a while, the sudden appearance of other characters (when Sam enters he mentions that the gym isn't full, but by the shower scene there are lots of guys), and the weird flow of time in the space in general adds something extra special. Plus there's something to be said for instant-conversion stories: I love a good long resistance/brainwashing period, but sometimes it's amazing to watch someone just instantly fall under the spell. Fantastic job. :)
11/23/24, 9:39 PM
May we have some more please, sir? Excellent story!