Recent Comments

3/6/25, 3:24 AM
I was so happy to see this series updated!! I loved this chapter and I'm really enjoying the fine line being walked between arousal and fear. I second the praise for the dialogue too, it's super well written and the characters feel very rounded and alive! I can't wait to read more!!

3/6/25, 3:43 AM
@[JimsJorts](/user/show/10008527) Thank you! For the dialogue, I try to put myself in each character’s shoes, identify where their thoughts and emotions are at in the moment, and type what comes to mind- I think this method captures the flow of real life conversation well.
3/5/25, 3:45 PM
Nothing easy about writing a sex scene, but you recognized that our emotional investment in the characters makes the sex so much more powerful. Well done, my friend! And compliments to your dialogue -- reads very naturally, just like people talking.

3/5/25, 10:00 PM
@[absman420](/user/show/162063) Thank you! This is high praise, coming from a man who has written sex scenes that I still revisit to this day, at least a decade on from when he originally discovered them! I want my sex scenes to serve the plot and emotional beats of the story: I still want them to be fun and sexy and for guys to read them one-handed, but the sex should flow naturally from the emotions of a scene. Characters fuck because of something that happened between them, or something happens between them because they fuck. Like how in musicals, characters start singing when the emotions get too big for simple dialogue, but here, instead of breaking out into Sondheim, they reenact Tom of Finland pictures!
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3/5/25, 7:29 PM
Ohhh, I love it! I'm really enjoying this story! Personally, I'd love to know what happened to actor Chis Pewter from Chapter 2 in a later chapter (or in a spinoff, maybe?), I loved how the deeper he went into the interview, the progressively dumber he got. It would be really hot to see him on the set of a sequel, or in a later movie. I imagine the effects would be quite pronounced then!
3/5/25, 3:03 PM
Glad to see a new chapter :)
3/5/25, 12:53 PM
Yes! Been waiting for more chapters
3/5/25, 2:11 AM
I knew from part one that you are an expert at building up sexual tension and excitement, and part two not only confirmed that, but it proved that you can write the sex just as amazingly as the build up. I adored every word of this, it was so worth the wait. So hot to see Pat accept how raunchy Brian is, and I'm so excited to see where things go from here!

3/5/25, 11:53 AM
@[KBlume](/user/show/10031073) Thank you for your kind words! I wanted to get into the meat of the story, as it were, relatively quickly, but I wanted to build the anticipation- there needed to be some preamble before I got to the sex! Pat's acceptance of Brian's raunchy side is not entirely organic- there's another force at work that is influencing him to embrace it. We'll get into that down the road- have patience!
3/5/25, 7:35 AM
I don't usually leak in my cage much but let me tell you I've got a mess going in down there. I love Alex's predicament, wearing the collar, all the things that can be done to him without his say- the muzzle, restraints that appear at Ethan's whim, but the personal connection their forging really brings it all together for me. I love how they both feel they're fumbling through this and I get a sense each of them is getting more and more confident in what they're doing, embracing what they each want.
3/5/25, 6:22 AM
This story was like precision engineered for me 😵‍💫
3/5/25, 5:15 AM
Excellent!