I've meant to post this for a while so here we go. I can't help but shake the feeling that this chapter and somewhat in the previous feels 'forced'. As if the chapters just don't sit right. Everything up to now has been polished smooth with a clear rhythm and progression that flowed. Not only were their some punctuation/grammatical errors that the editor should have corrected in this chapter. But what's happening to Jamie doesn't, and by extension this whole ordeal he is currently in, doesn't flow with the rest of the story. Above all, where and how is Jamie able to resist so hard? Why is he suddenly, now in this moment choosing to unleash his bottled anger? Jamie submitted to his Master. Fully. He symbiont is fully integrated with him. Therefore, Myriad should already have full awareness of Jamie's state of mind and physical condition. And can therefore correct at anytime. Which was proven when he went inside and took note of the mental dam in Jamie's psyche. Jamie shouldn't be able or have reason to be such a hard-ass to Dusk. Yet here he is fighting back tooth and nail over a collar? This doesn't add up. Granted, Jamie has been aware of the complicity and duality that Myriad operates under. He knows the corruption of the Association. He has several legitimate reasons to be angry and frustrated about not having control over his fate. And all this has been hinted at and brought up through the series. But the timing and execution of this here is suspect. Its too sudden and too unexplained. Regardless, I am still loving this series. I am eager for more. And maybe more context will be provided in the next chapter. This has been such an amazing read throughout. With that said, I might have called it. That this story would either progress in one of two directions. That either Jamie fully integrates with the network under Myriad and goes after the heroes. Or he gets caught and sent to the Tomb. So unless that white at the end here was Jamie's attack, it seems a prison break is coming.

Need need NEED a part two! A portion with Jesse and his dad in a 'session" together would be so hot. Please!

Thank you for recognition! Hope u will enjoy as I did in my fantasy, should you have any suggestions - I appreciate (with a private story tailored for you!)

Looks like they won't be friends anymore when this is done

Omg this is literally the best story ever 😍 I'm so excited to become a dedicated reader and fan! Genius story and writing x

Freaking hot!

Thanks, great start!

This was great! Forced jerking off his "clint" and taking Kevin's load in Grey's mouth then giving it back to Kevin in his own mouth - SO HOT!

Hello, I have just read the three chapters you posted ... I could comment many things of the story and would probably be able to write a very detailed feedback about it, but I'll try to stick to the main ideas. There was a point a really reconsidered to keep reading and I'm -really- glad I did. I usualy read stories here to, let's be honnest, have a lot of fun. You are the second story I read (and gosh how many I have read), that actually really resonated with me as a person. It's only my opinion, but I really like the depth you managed to achieve with both characters, with so little writing (I mean it's not a 700 pages novel and yet you managed awesomely). Even with this fantasy bracelet idea (very cool by the way), you managed to make the story live in a way I find hard to describe with words. I want to deeply thank you for your work and I wish you never to feel pressured to write or post anything quickly. I hope that in the end, you will keep enjoy writing as much as I enjoyed your stories. Thank you also for the time you took to work on it, there must be a lot of things that, as a reader, I would not even think about, things you went through as a writer. (PS : I apologize if some phrasings sound awkward, french being my first language I still struggle sometimes, especially when I get a bit emotionnal).

i normally love stories which center around a submissive's loss of control. Strangely enough even though i think this whole custom of creating non-consenting drones who remain aware of their unwanted and immoral treatment, the concept as a fantasy is still surprisingly somewhat arousing. While on the surface the loss of control is quite hot, it is interesting that for me the more immoral a story's concept, the less i enjoy the story and the less likely i am to come back to it. In my mind in a good BDSM relationship, both Dom and submissive, and even in the more extreme case of Master and slave(s), every participant must get something positive out of the relationship. In this case i see nothing positive for the drones at all for the rest of their lives. For me the sadness of this situation overrides my libido.