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4/11/24, 7:50 AM
The plot thickens! I am still hoping they end up perversely happy. A long weekend, spring break, summer, christmas, long may this story continue 🤣

4/11/24, 3:11 PM
@[Norismo](/user/show/2849185) Heh maybe I'll have to do some special holiday "episodes" at some point. Maybe stuffing Chris for thanksgiving 😜
4/8/24, 7:50 PM
It still has me wondering what's next. I never realized how bearish Eric is. MMM, leather daddy bear sounds lovely.

4/10/24, 10:13 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) I love a good sexy bear so I usually envision my characters as some sort of bear/dadbod/beef cake. But if the physical description doesn't really effect the story than I sometimes leave it vague. I like being able to envision my own preferences on characters so I try to explained that to my readers.

4/11/24, 2:31 AM
@[Cargo Cub](/user/show/10027653) Sounds good. I imagine them both in many ways.
Anonymous
4/10/24, 6:27 AM
I don't know how I somehow missed this series after loving the original 0_o Def agree with Tanners92 about Eric's size, especially if Eric loves the attention! Can't wait to read the next installment, these are a delight to read!

4/10/24, 10:16 PM
@Anonymous Thank you for the kind words! I don't really like where I left the first series but I didn't really have a plan for that one and I wasn't sure where to go next. This story has a decent outline for the foreseeable future so it should continue for a while.
4/10/24, 1:00 AM
I can’t wait to see what happens with Peter when he joins the story. Any chance Eric’s cock gets shrunk? Big muscles small cock.

4/10/24, 10:14 PM
@[tanners92](/user/show/963694) I do like that idea, but I've got some scenes I want to do with him at his current size first.. maybe a small chastity cage would be a good compromise to humble the himbo..
Anonymous
4/5/24, 3:48 AM
And so it begins. This chapter was an interesting look into the world of the landed knights, in this case Frederick. I was expecting Frederick to be akin to a knight who was corrupted by material wealth and power, but as we see here that isn't the case. It's clear he has deep regrets for what happened to Collin, and cares about Tristan. The opening chapter where Gregory and William are bantering about with each other is soft in its humor. Here are the two men who were once separated come together anew- amidst their banter- still incredibly lewd banter but banter still. Yet at the same time, the insidious want they have to corrupt others is present. Even if they believe it's for the best (and it definetly seems like abuses influcted upon the knights are a major reason for Gregory's corruption at least), that is somewhat terrifying. The implications collin and Gregory were sent on suicide missions is chilling. If that's what they're willing to do with respected individuals- either they are really lacking manpower or have grown cruel themselves- being at the beck and mercy of the nobility- which Gregory alluded to. William on the other hand crying when he hears about collin from Frederick was also another nice touch. It highlights that despite being transformed, he isn't exactly gone. That he even went out of his way to comfort Frederick was pretty surprising. There's really nothing in it for him to do so. That his motivation to change Frederick changed to make him feel happy and guilt free is yet again another showcasing of his kindness. On the other hand, Frederick essentially trying to drown Tristan with contaminated wine was rather scary. Frederick had enough control to stop that and clearly feels guilt but I seriously hope the corruption doesn't make him try that on Tristan again. I'm suprised that William didn't kill the messenger birds- but it makes sense- he doesn't seem the type to kill unless he needs to. And now with Tristan getting transformed (who also seems to have the hots for frederick)- this is about to get complicated fast. After that, it's likely the whole fiefdom that will fall under next. On the other hand, there is something tragic about how William says Collin would want them to be happy. If Collin somehow managed to survive and remain human, him running into William and the others is going to be right out of his worst nightmares. Or you know, he could be dead. Which I think would haunt them both. Though, I do wonder something. Considering how strong the saliva and ejaculate the demons are emitting, won't somebody eventually notice it? They can try to disguise themselves and that works in terms of appearence, but if somebody tries to clean their room people might start noticing things (cleaning crew or janitorial staff etc). Or did they work a safeguard for that?

Pcm
4/5/24, 5:08 PM
@Anonymous I originally made a mistake and left out the last part of this story (particularly, the Tristan's part). I have since rectified this and the story uploaded in entirety. To me, it is simply not fun to corrupt already corrupted individuals. Not only would the corruption change so little about them, I don't that most readers, myself included, want to see bad people happy. In my story, being turned into a large muscled horny demon is a type of happiness, I think. As of present, I don't think that Frederic's account can be fully believed. After all, he is grief-stricken because both incidences did occur against people he was very close with. Possibly, from the higher ups' perspective, Collin was sent to help diseased mine workers on another routine cleric mission and Gregory who had that legendary status was sent to guard the innocents from a demonic horde -- dangerous but necessary, and they would trust no one else but him to carry out such task. In this chapter and the last one, I tried to hint that William's foremost desire is to have a family. For a while, he was content to have the family of his dream with Gregory as his surrogate father and Collin as his little brother. The rest of his loved ones similarly fill roles of his extended family. The corruption has added a new erotic element to his desire, though. (In a way the familial theme is the crux of this series.) I thibk that fundamentally, Frederic does crave control. Control itself is, of course, not good or evil. However, he also hates loneliness and wants to share the control he has with others. His corruption targets that desire because it is so prone to becoming twisted. In a way, Collin's death is the major catalyst for the sotry. It would be ironic if he were actually alive, wouldn't it? With Tristan, I'm going with the Greek ideas that all male students do have an attraction towards their mentors (intellectually, but you know what I mean). Of course, under normal circumstances, the squires would never act on that attraction. Sometimes, a squire might jerk himself to the image of his handosme knight, but that is it. Tristan, however, has a specific reason to be loyal to his boss though. ...There is no way that I can answer this last question without creating a plot hole, is there? Let's see that people just don't go to the remote village in the first chapter, and Gregory and William do clean up after themselves every now and then. Or maybe they have cleaning magic? Maybe they are just very lucky.

Anonymous
4/5/24, 7:05 PM
@[Pcm](/user/show/10039396) I do see what you mean. The combination of virtuous and more darker traits together is much more dynamic thematically speaking for the transformed. The idea that Frederick is an unreliable narrator due to his self professed guilt isn't something I had thought of but makes sense. It does work that the higher ups might have thought about Collin and Gregory's placements that way. Williams desire for family is definetly clear both here and in the prior chapter. Besides lust, a major driving factor is his fear of being abandoned. As for Tristan, it seems like he and Frederick have an interesting history with each other based on what you've mentioned. Something like Gregory and William. His desire for control works well considering his guilt, but he'll need to be careful not to let that control him. I do think that from Tristan perspective that last scene was straight out of a horror film. But for William it was the beginning to happy ending for them all. The discrepancy is striking. And yet somehow william manages to find commonality while trying to convince him. As for Collin, I can imagine he's more to be a ghost in the narrative. Dead, but still haunting in the scenes, as more of why he died is revealed. We've seen some clues here, but there's more to go. And yes, the cleaning aspect I can see being solved by either magic or vigilance. Seeing as their keeping a low profile, they likely have to do it. We see William holding back his saliva so it makes sense they could do the same to some extent with other bodily fluids. As for what you mentioned prior, I think if William had managed to resist Gregory, I feel this story would have taken a pretty interesting twist where Gregory essentially takes the archetype of the seeking maddened lover. And it would be easy too- if the knights taught infected people no longer had their souls or were lost causes who only used their past behaviors as humans to decieve, William wouldn't have been devieved,. Gregory likely would resort to harsher methods in his desperation but likely would have to pivot once he realized he was hurting William. It would be more of a emotionally wrenching story in that sense of seeking out the one you love despite being in....very changed circumstances.

Pcm
4/8/24, 7:49 AM
@Anonymous Sorry for the late reply! The second part of chapter two is done and is pending for approval! On one hand, Frederic's self professed guilt may have skewered his perspective a bit. On the other hand, that does not mean that the higer-ups aren't assholes for endangering the men for objectives that are difficult to secure, knowing that they may as well be sacrificed... Perhaps we might even hear from their perspective later! I do think that Tristan is somewhat of a replacement goldfish for William at the moment. I particularly like writing for him, and purposefully draws out his submission. I do hope that when he inevitably succumbs, the wait will be worth it (for him and for you.). It's the plan that you will learn more about Collin with each chapter. I have been considering touching on Gregory's corruption lately. His own fall will likely involve much more coercion than he does to others, he has been stuck in the Infernal Realm for a long time, after all. But like dominoes, his corruption and demonhood does make others fall much easier.

Pcm
4/10/24, 9:13 PM
@Anonymous Anyway, thank you so much for having provided such detailed analysis of the story. I'm really happy that I got to discuss my story with others.:grinning: I do look forward to reading your comment again, but I understand if you are busy.
4/10/24, 4:02 AM
Oddly felt things ended just as got started. So much set up and enjoyable developing at the beginning then after the Budd explosion and senator met son ..I thought going to expand a bit more as the men got to know each other or went back or whatever. Transition to who now going to be and enjoy settling in. What's here is nice. Just feels a little anti climactic. We had this hot ensemble cast each mixing it up in a formula introduction with a wider conflict to drive interest as you did the " boring " day to day stuff (who is the bad kid, how will the ranch heads finesse their foe, will they give up the client, what that like or result in. Getting to see the staff and activities of the ranch or just changes to town and folk and what made) and then the changes and the enjoyment and then. .. Whoop all home plus summary of how it all worked out. Thing is the intimacy and build through IS great. The transition good too. But it's like things abruptly end for the hyper giant thing. Which feels...off. It was set up. But part of the disappointment is I liked the budds for their familiarity. Checking in was a treat as was their dynamic threats to their valued status quo some internal, others external. So felt it would be crisp when they'd get to respond or receive the rewards of the plan they implemented and pleasing to see how working that. Though i suppose not much else fresh to cover. Christian's obviously getting his comeuppance. Keywon got to indulge his bottomness. Gangly grew. Smokey got wild. etc. Just felt had a nice deliberate pace and build up and in the zone then to play through entertaining procedural. And now its over. I suppose" want more," especially as promised to build on somethings you are eager to explore is a good thing to feel at an ending. Well. I would rate this story overall an adjusted 3 on balance for writing. 4 on ideas and setting development. 3.5 characters. A nice spread we got to see play off into the build up Hotness is an obvious 4, thanks to many qualities. variety, character and interaction, setting, distinct voices, unique challenges, and goals and results offered offered in how came together. Mind control. To me the twisty seduction and mental effects permeate. More a feel than a specific thing. Used well save where a little abridged. So a decent experience with an abrupt if happy end

4/10/24, 11:09 AM
@[Darmani](/user/show/138470) Your criticism is very fair -- in a lot of ways, we share some structural opinions. This is one of the products of "Pantsing" (making it up by the seat of your pants). Like you, I love the Budd Brothers, and I didn't want to enter into a story where nothing happens to them, or they don't "grow" as characters. There's no point in checking in with them if nothing happens to them. I'm paraphrasing Vonnegut: (as an author) you have to do terrible things to your characters, really put them through it, especially the ones you love. This story is a lovely 1st draft. It's got several potential arcs and some good character studies. Now that I know the ending, I would put this whole thing through a 2nd draft, where I'd correct some structural stuff and the plot flow, as well. Alas, this isn't that sort of project -- and as I mentioned above, I'm anxious to move on to other things. (This whole time, I've been researching my new novel.) Writing = Redrafting

4/10/24, 5:20 PM
@[absman420](/user/show/162063) Redrafting. True. I just hope am not ungrateful or discouraging. And appreciate want to move on so will keep an eye out

4/10/24, 8:28 PM
@[Darmani](/user/show/138470) Not even slightly -- grateful for well thought out criticism delivered in a kind way. Nothing hurts my feelings anymore -- I'm too old to feel anything other than nostalgia.
J
3/27/24, 5:05 PM
Update Soon?

3/31/24, 6:39 AM
@J Probably this week. I'm about 6200 words now and this just might be the longest chapter I write.

J
4/7/24, 1:32 PM
@[avionneX](/user/show/1683719) Update tonight?

4/8/24, 2:05 AM
@J I'll submit the story tomorrow, and the admins will probably review it for a day, so maybe 2 days from now.

4/10/24, 8:29 AM
@[avionneX](/user/show/1683719) New chapter published. Just wait for the admins to approve.
4/10/24, 4:20 AM
I love this chapter and the world building of it all. Onyx, the smarmy little bastard, has grown on me a fair bit. I especially appreciate the fact that despite being a snide brat he is rather sharp. He seems to be the one holding everyone accountable, and I rather liked his psychoanalysis on dear Jaime. I cant help but feel as though Dusk definitely has some idealized version of Jaime in his head. Looking forward to the next installation!
4/9/24, 5:06 PM
Woohoo! What an exciting conclusion! Can't wait to see what a bunch of gay musclefreak giants get up to on their own private tropical island!

4/9/24, 9:45 PM
@[ParadoxBear](/user/show/10002417) I'm sure they'll be fine until the computer system that cannot fail does, the security system goes offline, and the exhibits start attacking the guests...

4/10/24, 1:18 AM
@[absman420](/user/show/162063) The *real* question is, will the security system fail because a disgruntled employee will disable it in an attempt to steal some of the hyper cum to sell to a shady businessman (and get transformed himself in the process)?
4/9/24, 11:09 PM
Love this story so much, it tickles so many of my fanatsies. I've been waiting for this chapter and I'm so happy because it was even better than I was expecting

4/10/24, 12:26 AM
@[Hurricane](/user/show/1255929) Very cool, I'm glad to tickle your fantasies and better, can I ask which part? Maybe I'll try and hit them again...